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What I have...

Craters,
carved by pain,
filled with joy.

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1. What I have (7 words)

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  • Nymphetemine
    March 15, 2009

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    Intense truth comes from just a few words which you have penned dear poet.. A positive poem arises from the past of pain.. I know how this feels myself.. If there was no pain how could we know true joy? Perfection comes in small packages so I am told and this is true of this poem.. Well done dear poet.
    Love and Light AngelofLight

  • phoenixonfire
    February 3, 2009

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    I like the use of word craters...its unique and it sums up the rest 6 words beautifully! ~pri


  • Mirthryl
    February 3, 2009
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    Excellent imagery, and profound use of limited words.