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Reflection

Come hold me close

Where memory expands
beyond the reach of Universes

Break open fragile shell of containment
and consider yourself spent
into many realms that fire up to flame

Love and romance command the night
Magic flutters at our mirrored command
Where life lapsed against subtle horizon
and taught me how to play, I float on easy

Awestruck and amused
I laugh at me for enchantment's sake
evolving from simple things
Like lingering kisses behind my ear
and delicious responses I freely gave










A contest entry

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  • awannabepoet
    May 4

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    Oh is it already over? I could listen to these words until the sky turn a certain hue of pink and the moments turn to soft music "Sexual Healing" cause I got that feeling I need to kiss my sweetheart behind the ears and give her some kind of feeling about the way I love her.

    I like it, I like it so!


  • leo2
    February 7

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    It's amazing how unimportant cold, mundane reality is when the flames of romance are licking your ear. Best wishes in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


  • Dalaney gold member
    February 4

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    oh, how i love the last stanza!  I mean, I adore the entire poem, but your last few words just hit home with me.  Thank you so much for entering, Renee.  Love, Lane


  • BonnieQ silver member
    February 4

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    Floating on Air

    This is gorgeous, my darling Sis. It has a gentle, floating on air kind of quality and beautifully romantic; the kind that leaves the more intimate things to the reader's imagination or dreams, as it should be. I hope Dalaney finds this as GOLD as I do.

    Much love & hugs, SisBon

  • darrylblacksr
    February 3

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    Wow, this is definitely a reflection in my mind and allows me to revisit the senses which seemed to have been a sleep for a while thanks for the memories. Thanks for sharing it with me and I wish you the best in the contest...


  • Peteskid gold member
    February 3

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    the senses have a cosmic expanse here, and they come to sparkle like the sky at night... lovely, expressive poetry ...PK


  • smiley
    February 3

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    Excellente

    this was a wonderful and soothing piece.. I can totally feel the love here.

    Yvonne


  • afroqban
    February 3
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    this is beautiful, i loved every word...and i do mean every word lol. great job


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    February 3

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    Uh huh...behind the ear, or the along the side of the neck, one of my favorite places to kiss a woman.

    Nicely penned my dear,
    All the best.
    MJ.

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