You see, all I wanted was for you to hear
The beating of my heart and feel again
What once brought the most beautiful thoughts
And feelings into our lives
I wanted you to understand that I still loved you
I would have done anything for you
Would have walked the world, climbed the highest mountain
If you would only turn around with that look in your eye
Instead of turning your back
And walking away from me
I wanted you to understand my feelings
So that I could give you the love you deserve
I was confused when all that once was beloved
Turned to an aggressive destructive hate
And the lie you told me "I love you"
Came to light, for love was not evident
When you told me how hurt you were
How you'd been lied to, how you'd been used
How you were the one who was a victim
Yet I know inside that I never hurt you
And I never used you or called you names
Or took your money or your hospitality
Or turned my back upon you
Or mistrusted you, or blamed you
Or took you for granted
I didn't do any of those things my love
Those were the things you did to me...
And never realised my love, my forgiveness
And if I had done those things my love
Why could you not forgive me...?
A contest entry
- And I screamed "I love you" but you just walked away... by August Starlight.
775 points, ended February 12, 71 entries
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Stunning work here gypsy....
you poetically let it all out...
our own private perceptions and obsessions with the chronological order of who broke who's heart...
people fall out of love when they cant see themselves in the other person any more...
all the values and believes that you thought you saw in someone else......
they are not as close to yours as you thought.....
Then you both get to the part where you just want to be right...to prove that your version has more vility....held more in the reality of what went wrong.....
so many lonely right people.
The poem was beautiful and made me ponder many things...
so it is art to me lass...
Bless you gypsy,
Liam
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Aye. .I think you're right in what you said... Thank you for those words..much appreciated. You are a very deep person. I like that.
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Amazing poem.
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Nice flow, and an easy passage through the poem - each thought leads on to the next. The final line seems to turn the poem around - nicely done!
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This is truly great. It's easy to relate to, easy to understand, and filled with emotion. Thank you for entering my contest.
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