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Damaged By Crule Intentions

    Your words were a flame defrosting her heart and through it all she became a fool for you,
    And now she sees that she was so naive to ever think that she could put her trust into you.
    You called her BABY GIRL whice gave her
                NOURISHMENT,
    You called her SEXY which gave her
                ENCOURAGEMENT.
    But what burned her ears
              DAMAGED HER,
                  SCARED HER,
                    FORCED the FLAME 2 DIE,
and once AGAIN, COMMENCED to to make her HEART GROW COLD,
    She feels as though
            you DECEIVED her,
              you DISHEARTENED her,
and sent a rush of contempt 2 the DEPTH of her very SOUL.
    Never taking into consideration that as well as she is
                      PURE and SWEET
shes,
            VULNERABLE,
                    FRAGILE,
                        and EASLY BROKEN,
and could get carried away by the simplest of
            MELLIFLUOUS words
                      that are SPOKEN.
  Why did you lead her on leting her
      WINE and DINE
              IN EVERY WORD YOU RECITED,
feeding her fairy tale POISON causing her worlds to becone undevided.
  She confided in you so that you were able to touch her in ways of wich she had never been,
putting her
                          MIND,
                            BODY,
                                and SOUL
at ease because the pasion that she felt she senced that it said more than just friends.
  And as for the
                      INEVITABLE KISS
of which you placed
                          DELECTABLY UPON HER LIPS,
she never imagined that it would b so VENOMOUS
                             

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venomous

this is not finished and this is the first poem that i have put on here in a while but i will get to again but 4 now tell me what you think

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  • graybeard
    May 6
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    Not too wild about the use of numbers instead of words. The form you used here kinda takes away from the poem also. Breaks up the flow. At the end 'Mellifluous' is just kind of hanging there by itself, suggests an incomplete thought, you might want to look at that. Good subject though.


  • Antebellum
    May 5

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    Your words were a flame defrosting her heart and through it all she became a fool 4 you"

    My favorite lines.
    awesome write. I enjoyed reading this.


  • silent.insanity
    March 24
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    This is a great poem!!!!!!!!!!! I love it. keep writing!


  • August Starlight silver member
    February 12

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    Ahh this is soooo true. I love it. My favorite line is: "Your words were a flame defrosting her heart and through it all she became a fool 4 you"

    amazingness.

    • cherrysmile
      February 12
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      thank you so much for reading it and im glad that you liked it but come back to it again ill be finishing it soon love ya!!!!


  • livin4poetry
    February 4
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    this was very good

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