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counting down to you

one is for your only wish
two is your eyes that see thew me
three is for your mind, body, and soul
four is how you use them
five is for your fingers that dance on my chest
six is the time we should wake but don't
seven is for the best week in a long time
eight is for the years you exceed
nine is how many times i think about you every minute
ten is for how many seconds you hold in smoke

i can't even count how many time a day i long to be with you

Author notes

it's all true

can you count?

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  • ApollosMuse
    February 19
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    AMAZING!!!


  • August Starlight silver member
    February 12

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    This is really good; I love how you used the countdown.
    Favorite line = "seven is for the best week in a long time"
    =]


  • L.Jay
    February 3
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    such a wonderful poem about new love. very nice!