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Masquerade




Everday a new masquerade
  fresh and enduring
  painted in colours
    so uniquely wound
    that every figment
    in subtle melodies
          softly retaliating
                into five points
  that one cannot connect.

As I walk out this gate
  the iron melts
  questioning my intentions
    vividly drowning
    lemonades in a veiled perspective.


  Suddenly. Slowly.

The sound of the pensive mirrors
    rumbles within the expanse
    of my societal belief
        and every step that I take
    solemnly calls itself degeneration.




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Prompt: Social Atrophy
20 lines

The social atrophy here is the loss of faith in society and its betrayel!! She is running away from it but slowly facing an atrophy/ a sickening degenration!

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  • couldbeworse
    February 18, 2009
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    style , flow, imagery...amazing! great write.


  • SaraMaria
    February 6, 2009
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    I really like the imagery that you are using, this is really good stuff.


  • The.poet.of.hearts
    February 6, 2009

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    humz, you have expressed well, yes i can say this is poetry, real poetry! which is to express the core effect of society
    very touching work
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    by
    the poet of hearts and beautiful words


  • Spiritual Soul
    February 5, 2009

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    this is awesome, I love the style and the flow of this, this whole poem is just amazing. I love the language too, awesome job!
    Blessings,
    ~Michaela~


  • untouched pages
    February 5, 2009

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    This is rockin,..... I love this style...
    ""Suddenly. Slowly.

    The sound of the pensive mirrors
    rumbles within the expanse
    of my societal belief
    and every step that I take
    solemnly calls itself degeneration.""

    These lines above show that your a true poet, It takes me back to my Masquerade days. My friends and I would plan these huge Masquardes that would probaly have 500 people come to. It was a blast. I love how you took the inspiration and turned it into a work of art!!

    • phoenixonfire
      February 5, 2009
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      I love those parties! unfortunately,we don't have any here! So, next time be sure to invite me!!


  • ciara12
    February 5, 2009
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    i really like this.... it make me think of p[hantom of the opera!! lol!


  • Grey Mouser
    February 4, 2009

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    Through the veils of lifes iniquities we search amongst the many flavors to find one that suits our tastes. Not always finding but always searching, even as the walls crumble around us. Well done and best to you. Many thanks for entering the contest.
    GM

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