Everytime we touch,
You scar my soul,
And when i say it hurts,
Your glad your in control,
You never cared for anyone,
You never gave a damn about anyone,
And when I held you,
You weren't there,
And when I kissed you,
You were so far gone,
You couldnt feel me when I held you,
You never saw me cry,
It wasnt that you didnt love me,
It was that you couldnt accept it,
You couldnt accept love,
Or me,
And you couldnt understand how much i loved you,
But you couldnt try,
Your heart had frozen over,
Your touch as cold as ice,
When did your warmth leave you,
When did the spark leave your eyes,
When did on the world you turn your shoulder,
When did you become deaf to my cries,
I tried so hard to pull you from the darkness,
But instead you sucked me in,
Lost in a word of pain and hurt,
Where love can never win,
And i always loved you baby,
I always tired so hard,
I sat with you,
And talked to you,
And held a stoney hand,
I grasped your deadened body,
I kissed numb lips,
And still you would not hear me,
You couldnt feel the pain i did,
You couldnt love with abandon,
You couldnt love at all,
And all the girls they loved you,
Swarmed like flies over your body,
They sucked you up and spat you back out into my arms,
You dribbled over my skin,
And every time I patched you up and you would stab me once again,
Cut my heart out and let it drip for your amusement,
And I sat there and whimpered only a little,
But my life revolved around you being happy,
And i wouldn't let pain get in my way,
But you were never there,
You couldnt hear me when i said it to your face,
You werent able to,
You hurt me,
I love you,
Let me go,
Im still a puppet on your strings,
Break me.......
By Errin Hellingrath
Author notes
Yeah idk
A contest entry
- Love. (Prewrites welcome) by Coloured Skies.
600 points, ended February 3, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Hey give me some feedback guys?
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This is sooo true in many ways. . I love it
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It's a beautifully emotional piece. It's a very long sentence though, a few full stops would help the flow greatly. Other than that awesome.
And when I kissed you,
You were so far gone,
So much emotion and imagery. I love the way you end this piece.
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wow. this describes my last relationship so well. the girls that all loved him, the fact that he couldn't except that i loved him no matter what. love is a hard thing to do, and harder when it is unrequited
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Wow great write , It was sad but I liked it and the story it tells. Thankyou for entering
Good luck.
Tash.
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im speechless at this poem im sorry you feel this way
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i really liked this, its tells a sad story, and the imagery is great, no typos that i noticed, well writen piece. good luck. xx
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