Trapped inside my poetry,
written with a ball-point pen.
re-writing the last day we spoke
"I'm sorry I love you"
"then why?"
"we just shouldn't be together"
then my world turned into a blur
and tears streamed down my eyes
your words stitched "X"s in my heart
I walked slowly to find my father in glee
with piercing words that made my brain pound
"I'm engaged"
Just the thought of love made me scream,
Though it had been summer my parallel universe
was Grey and the birds flew home as my mouth opened wide
and a screech escaped my mis-formed lips.
Every song on the radio seemed to involve love,
every thought in my mind was your precious voice
echoing over and over 'i love you'
the simplest words made me weep
the thought of your love made me weak.
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Comments
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that was sad...very touching and done in an uncliche way...but a lil correction in the last line...it should be thought instead of though...
Good luck
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This is a very touching poem. But I don't know which prompt you were going for and also which family member you were after. So please let me know before the contest ends or I will have to delete it....
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This is so sad, tugs at the heart, you express your emotions so clearly in this piece, it's wonderful. I really liked it though wonderful job, and good luck in the contest!
Blessings,
~Michaela~
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Very sad
This is beautifully written and descriptive. IT really makes you feel the emotion within the words. Absolutely lovely. Great Work
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Oops forgot the aplaud
X
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This is realllllllly good and very cute!
Love the lines:
"Every song on the radio seemed to involve love,
every thought in my mind was your precious voice
echoing over and over 'i love you"
completely understand that feeling.
Great write.
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Awww... too cute!!! I remember how my husband asked me to marry him.. it was the day i got my wisdome teeth out!! i can't believe it.. its pretty crazy!!! I really liked this write.. I wish you all the best!!
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This is very lovey dovey!! I really like this poem especially because its so innocent!! Everyone who reads this can relate to it!!! I like that stiches line very much! Thanks for sharing and good luck!!
~pri
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Though it had been summer my parallel universe
was Grey and the birds flew home as my mouth opened wide
and a screech escaped my mis-formed lips.
great imagery here. excellent write.
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