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It All Began With The Word Goodbye...

It all began with the word goodbye...

You were like the hottest ray of the sun,
And from the heavens you showered me with love,
Like the most pleasant summer rain.
In your absence I'm but a withered flower,
Waiting to bloom again.

Though the smiles that lit up my darkest days
Have disappeared, I'm not instilled with sadness,
For I feel nothing...
Nothing except the shadow of your lips
Pressed softly against mine, but that feeling vanishes quickly.

Slowly the memories of our night begin to fade,
And a shrouding darkness fills the void you left me in.
Suddenly I remember nothing,
Not the taste of your lips, nor the warmth of your hands.
At that moment I begin to descend down
The spiraling staircase into hellfire.

A spiders thread of grief and anguish spins around
My body, hardening my shell.
My eyes lose their shimmer, for who could see
A faint light covered by darkness anyway?
As I step off the last stair and into the deepest dungeon
Within myself, I shed a tear...

I can't remember happiness, I can't remember joy.
Every thought of you has faded into time...
I've lost the will to smile, I've lost the will to live.
I can only lie inside my heart, waiting for you,
To remind me what it feels like, to be loved...


~

Author notes

I'm not usually good at freeverse, I mostly write form and rhyme poetry.
I hope this poem doesn't make you feel what I was feeling when I wrote this, cause I know how much that would hurt. I've been missing my bf so much lately cause I haven't seen him in a while, so I needed to get this out of my system.

Hope you like it, and please tell me your honest opinion of it.

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  • Lady Michaella
    February 14

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    wow.. such a sad poem.. this made me teary... fantastic work here.. really well written free verse poem..

    thanks for entering! and best of luck in the contest!!

    Your Co-Judge,
    -Lemon Bee-
    xx

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  • misshugglebugglez
    February 4

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    yayyyyyyyy!!!! once again, i loved this! other peeps seems to loves it!!! wahoo!!! its ya birthday!!!
    amazingg job.. good luck in those contests!
    huggggglez,
    adria


  • peregrin
    February 3

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    Hmm...
    This is good for someone who doesn't normally write freeverse. See, I am the exact difference, I normally always write freeverse, rarely do I write a poem that rhymes. But blah blah blah.
    This is good.
    It is a really strong, emotional write, which is fabulous. =]
    You are just playing with the heartstrings. Always a strong aspect to a poem. Yes sir.
    *hugs* I do hope you feel better.
    If you ever need to talk, message me.
    =]

    Gwen

  • Nobodysboy
    February 2

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    I can relate, but you've got a lot of livin to do, it's nice to be that in love and all but, you've got a lot of living to do and if this person loves you that much back, then and only then should you feel that way.....

    • AngelsExodus
      February 2
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      He does, I don't get to see him very often... This is how I feel when I haven't seen him in a while, at the top of the hill before I know when I will see him again.
      I'm only sixteen, so of course I have living to do.
      Thank you for your comment.

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