Clumsy
with your long stemmed
fragile beauty
Accountable for the cracks
in light reflecting crystal
That cut my lips when I try to drink
And I am so very thirsty...
A contest entry
- "Cracks in the windshield" by JinSays.
775 points, ended February 3, 12 entries
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Comments
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A very interesting take on the prompt.
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Know what? Now that I think about it, I cant help but come to the obvious conclusion this was meant for me. Especially given the last comment you left on my work.
And it hurts.
Just as it was meant to.
So, if getting my attention and bringing me down was your intent, you've succeeded.
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Wow. look at all this broken glass. I have been busy working on domestic tranquility for a while and returned to find the mess. Maybe I can help. I am not going to jump to conclusions... but ask instead. Do I take this to mean my opinion is important to you? I was simply having problems coming up with a comment. I don't recall, maybe fatigue, confusion, over occupied mind with job problems...
This poem was snipped from one I wrote several years ago. I was trying to tap into the broken glass motif. Yes, the words are very powerful, you have shown me that...
I would never deliberately try to hurt you. I want the little finger tip touch that you and I have to always be positive, uplifting. You never need to volunteer for pain, Jin. And you can softly deflect a lot of it.
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