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I Want To Stroll Across Your Body

I want to stroll
across your body

tip toe
fingers on terrain

of fir trees and mountains
mounds and curved roads

a water fall
cascading hot

to mingle with mine
when I dive

Author notes

Just wrote what I'm feeling.

Option number 5

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  • whitecoffee
    June 17
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    OOH very nice and hot. I liked reading this, congrats on the gold


  • DramaQueen469 gold member
    May 26

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    This is beautiful; I love the imagery and subtle sensuality
    Thankyou so much for entering this piece, and I wish you the best of luck!

    Maria


  • Mrs LadyEnthralling
    March 8

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    this was a very creative poem here the vision was painted so hot and spicy this was a pleasure and good luck to you in the contest


  • shiratikva
    February 25
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    It's a very tasteful write


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    February 17
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    you imagery is simple, but has a "simplistic depth" to it
    that is quite amazing

    this was wonderful


  • abybaby
    February 13

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    a poem worth remembering.....i never save poems....but this one i will save....nd will keep with me forever.....tnx for such btful words


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    February 13
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    Thank you for your sensual entry, Josie

  • Judith Chandler
    February 10
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    Original and sensuous in a classy sort of way.

    Congrats on your bronze trophy.


  • MYsecondchance
    February 6
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    wow not what i was expecting i liked this one thanks for entering

  • SurrenderMyHeart
    February 4
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    you definitely raised the temp with me. Very nice write, like the metaphors. please write more

  • MarkReeves
    February 4
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    Excellent!

    This is lovely. The imagination can do wonders. I'm impressed.


  • hisaddiction
    February 3
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    very lovely..


  • Rainbow7
    February 3

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    tip toe
    fingers on terrain
    of fir trees and mountains
    mounds and curved roads
    a waterfall
    cascading hot
    to mingle with mine
    when I dive........................

    beautiufl!
    makes me horny...
    Metaphors are so crealy lustful!!!!


  • brokenangel78
    February 3
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    MMMMM very pleasing to read. xxx


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    February 3

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    This is great! You said so much with
    these words here. Well done and good
    luck to you with it in all of these contests!



    Jeremy0826


  • PastelMoons gold member
    February 2
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    You just raised the temperature
    in AP
    Great write!
    Thank you for entering.

    ~Pastel

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