The red of blood spilt
it waves in front of me
the wind,
it blows the sound of taps
the sound of what it cost to be free
in the back,
21 guns echo their song
and the old lady,
a grandmother,
she cries alone
these proud Americans,
her husband,
her son,
they have gone to God
The blue of valor and honor
It waves in front of me
the stars,
they show me a glimpse of heaven
a glimpse of how good God can be
in the back,
a small class of kids sing,
their old song of liberty
a grandmother,
she wipes her eyes to see
these proud Americans,
her grandson,
her granddaughter,
as they sing how good it is to be free
The white is for the pride
It waves in front of me
The wind,
It blows for all to see the colors
To see the pride of an American
In the back,
I hear “Let freedom Ring”
“God bless this land”
A grandmother,
She see her dream,
These proud Americans
Her husband,
Her son,
She thinks for these things
God bless America
Author notes
I'm proud to be an American, I'm not the best writer, I'm not the best speller, I'm not the best christian, but I love this land, thank God I was born in America
Written February 19th, 2004
A contest entry
- Show Me What You've Got by LostParamour.
500 points, ended September 16, 2004, 61 entries
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Thanks for entering my contest... Good luck!!! I'll make meaningful comments when I judge the poems... I'm just thanking everybody for entering...
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You are awesome dude!! You should be proud of the work you do. Please keep going and write more. ttyl.
~julia~ -
awesome
That was awesome man. It was really touching. i like the imagery in it. I also love the way it was written. The message was really good too. America is a wonderful place to live. I love living here and i hate it when american people put down there own country and curse the soldiers who are fighting for this country. Those people keep us free. any way good write man. -
Wow...this is really a good poem! The topic you choose to write about was GREAT! Very emotional and deep and you understand every feeling that it is in this poem. Keep writing. This is lyndsey if ya didn't know...lol. Check out some of my writes...good job again!
~Lyndsey~ -
thanks all you poeple!
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Great Topic To Write About. I Agree With All Above Me... You Have Out Done Yourself. This Could Drive A Blind Person Crazy. Great Write Hunny. Keep It Up PLEASE! Lotsa Love,
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Man, you really out did yourself with this one. This poem is stock full of all the patriotic feelings that I hold and I know you hold. When I read it, I caught a tear in the corner of my eye. This is AMAZING, Jerm. You just filled this full of emotion... and I really like that you got away from "your style". You expanded your writing and that is always good. You keep getting better and better. Keep it up!
-Demosthenes -
Awesome write man. I like it...even though it made me bleed. What? Hey, go away! Sorry. Sam is trying to touch me in wierd places. Gotta go.
-oaktree -
This is amazing! NEVER have I read anything so emotional, deep, and powerful!! I love this poem! It is really moving. I almost started crying, not for me, but for the grandmother... This was, in my opinion, your best poem!!! Thanks for sharing it with us!!!
Rita -
Wow that was awesome. I felt like I was standing next to you on a beach looking out. The imagery was just awesome. Very touching. Good luck in the contest!
Love,
~Jessie
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Dude this was awesome I usually prefer your forte which is alternating rhym but you did an awesome job with this. It has a really good sense of imagery but once again since you asked me to be totally honest I think it would be more apealing to me if it rhymed. This is by far your most inspirational well thought out poem good job but im still the Dark Lord of the sith and now I am once again typing words just to get points so thanks for the points.
-Bryan
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