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Pensive Passages

Missing image

Dimness of dusk

Drape not my eyes to dreams

So that I may visualize

Heaven’s breath

 

 

Let not my shadow drag

Ending in colourless portraits

Where fairytales fail

To inhale the light

 

 

But let pillars of wisdom’s strength

Protect me like earth angels

Where puddles become mist

And I thirst no more

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  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    February 21, 2009

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    this is most beautiful from you and once again shows why you are on my favorites. your words always leave me speechless. thank you for sharing this with me today. love you brother. viyanna rosemarie


  • queenie gold member
    February 7, 2009

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    the pillars of wisdom's strength is the line that sealed your words to the pic. the diversity shows so clearly in this one. the heart of you can be seen through it as usual. it is a winner.


  • Desire gold member
    February 6, 2009

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: Pensive Passages
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and after reading several times~ I am Honored also Humbled You took the time to pen for my contest You took the prompt and ran with it~ Bravo!!
    When I digest words written, images come through that grab hard~ I have to say- when I read Your words~
    But let pillars of wisdom’s strength
    Protect me like earth angels
    Where puddles become mist
    And I thirst no more
    This swelled the eyes for it felt like a sigh- came with exhalation of breath to clear Mind with Focue and then quill danced~ I feel this need for Serenity- like wanting something that is bothering the conscious- for it go to away- something nagging-and feeling of parched- just a taste to satiate- taste of what feels like an answer to a question
    Love the direction You took this prompt Hopefully my words make some sense Powerful verse and message You have brought forth

    These words grabbed and pulled-
    Let not my shadow drag
    Ending in colourless portraits
    Beautiful Voice spoken~

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit
    also best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    with much love and light~ Desire~*~


  • Uniquely-Scarred
    February 5, 2009
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    wow thats all im saying i loved the flow of this piece


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    February 5, 2009

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    This is so precious, with the angels and eyes of dreams. Wonderful flow of words. As you know I love angels and I am a dreamer. It was very much a pleasure to read your work of art.


  • XxGoldenxXDawnxX
    February 5, 2009

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    A true work of art you have penned here. I like how this poem flows and paints a picture of serenity. Fairytales fail to inhale the light... mmm... just delicious that one line is.


  • poetryality silver member
    February 4, 2009

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    Every single line in this eloquently written poem is pure genius. It is as if this passage was taken from a Psalms. It is not often that I witness your free verse Timothy. I am in awe! The beauty contained in these well chosen words sways my heart. I would highlight my favorite lines if the poem in its entirety did not engulf me so,

    EXTRAORDINART! I absolutely love this poem. I wish you the best in the challenge.


    Much Love Always Dear Brother ♥

    Your Sis',
    Renee


  • poeticpieces
    February 4, 2009

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    Brilliant!

    Way to weave such wisdom and beauty!
    Love ya dad, and I'm so proud of you.

    Love your son, Tim Jr.


  • rite gold member
    February 4, 2009

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    A deep longing for serenity and wisdom is contained in the words of your poem, laced in soft and tender phrases. They are the pathway to our destiny. May we one day meet there and then. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Take care.


  • Lonely
    February 3, 2009

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    Where puddles become mist.. the line was superb.. And the start of this poem was so breath taking! I loved this one baby.. Your poetry keeps getting better! Its always treat to the soul reading your work.
    Keep writing my sweetie

    Love,
    Wifey


  • caitlinlea
    February 3, 2009

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    This is very poetic, and for that reason you made a wise choice in keeping it short. It is not overdone, and the beauty does not get bogged down. Very nice!


  • kaibab silver member
    February 3, 2009

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    It is miricle to see, those times when sun pierces sky so bright you squint at the truth...such a penetrating wind it is when revelation glows in the sea of human insurrection...I love this Bro...so inspiring


  • Bronwyn
    February 3, 2009
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    Brilliant

    This is awesome!
    I love it!!!
    Thank you for sharing.


  • Stardust-luvr
    February 3, 2009

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    as sombred hearts lay weary upon souls of seeking hope your words reign with power in their brevity,tears rain for I somehow see myself in the write allways trying to ease others' burdens and disharmony in the spirit but somehow i feel I fail. your words are embraced with strength and empowering truth and hope. well done and many blessings always xxxxxxx love you bro !! xxxx


  • PerfectImperfection
    February 2, 2009

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    Oh my dear bro!!! I adore the power of your words here! There is such a beautiful and serene feeling of hope beyond, to surface the weary soul afar. The flow is wonderfully smooth and serene in its presentation. Excellent write!!!


  • Angelflower
    February 2, 2009

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    now what can one say to something so beautiful.. you have more then a way with words... You are a talented writer, best of luck in the contest.

    Angel


  • AnaelCathetelEcanus silver member
    February 2, 2009

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    Very elegantly written. Beautiful and intiguing words. The vision you portray is as delicate and becoming as your talents.

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