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Balloon


                      tests.
    don't feed me lies through that
silly tube

            crumpled paper after paper
                            flung into the brimming trash can
                                                                     

       
              in this haste
                full of dust and meaningless
stars flickering still, brightly
  through the crisp night



          sanctuary...





                              so you did tell me;
                  could it have possibly been worse?

 
  never mind. I can taste pennies
as though they were always there
        souring my pleasure
                      like sadistic drops of color



    disturbing my bowl of cereal
clumps of spiderwebs hang under the lamp

                           


                                    climbing up
                                        has never seemed so

                   

                                                                      necessary




Author notes

hmmmm. oh...how i love debussy. like a golden little cloud forming over and over again. and the harp...just makes you the perfect amount of sleepy. mm, metal never sounded so breathtaking. but i'm rambling.




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  • oldschoolhero gold member
    November 8
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    some was amazing! ;D!
    some i didn't feel?
    3 clappies anyways cuz i actually got to the end.
    lol
    [:


  • Nicsnowdemon silver member
    March 22
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    nice write


  • first forgotten
    February 16

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    aw, hun, this is a great write! your diction is the best part how are you? i've missed you so much! D=


  • peregrin
    February 4
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    This is brilliant...

    I love it Lauren.

  • my dear dime you've done it again. the layout just adds to it. I love the way your mind works

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