I saw a kiss on every tree I looked to,
and each kiss I saw look'd longingly like you,
but just like you, when autumn came,
the kisses fell and blew away.
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This one is pretty easy to read and understand. Feel free to leave a comment
-enkou-
Written February 19th, 2004
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DIS BLady dom moor die 4 comments, dit crank my style. ek is n celebrity maar wat nou, nous ek niks wat my tyd moet mors om sulke kak uit terig. nee wat, ek vlieg in die wolke met vlerke
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excellent
Eunice Tietjens said (when asked to define poetry): "...the two chief characteristics of poetry are condensation and the heightened mood, the condensation which will not allow an unnecessary syllable, and the heightened mood which must make every syllable sing or slash." This poem is that definition of poetry for me. Thank you so much for sharing this exquisite poem.
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very good
Well done. This has great imaging to it and I loved the ending:
but just like you, when autumn came,
the kisses fell and blew away.
thanks,
John -
Now confess--you have been reading William Blake!
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cute
cute
Kinda sad tho... cause everything 'blew away'
I think you captured the moment right
Peace and love
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Aaw, very nice. Hobbit Warrior is right; this _*is*_ really cute. This has a lot of emotion in it for such a short piece. I must say I really like it.
Baie mooi! Hou so aan.
*Mada*
Edited on Feb 19, 1:58 p.m. because 'stupid keyboard...'. -
Hey, simplistic, that works. I like it, it's just kinda cute. Keep up the good work, thanks for providing something I can absorb after a day of school lol.
Amanda
Edited on Feb 24, 1:20 p.m. because 'cause I'm a retard who can't spell providing'.
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