Colors splash across the sky,
Brilliance in itself makes you want to cry.
With effortless strokes the colors jump and dance on the wind,
Moving and shifting the clouds just as God's designed.
The perfect sunset,
Makes you think of an old Cowboy duet.
Colors splash across the sky,
Brilliance in itself makes you want to cry.
Author notes
This write is reflecting the feelings of a young couple sitting watching the sunset for the 1st time together!!
Untouched pages.
Cristy
A contest entry
- My Anniversary by Lady-Pegasus.
6000 points, ended March 29, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Amazing. People should pay to read your work. Simply amazing.
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Wonderful imagery and I enjoyed the author notes. I love how you used the beginning couplet as a concluding refrain. Good luck with judging.
Love,
Amera♥
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This is so beautiful
I could see the colors and
the moments of enchantment
thanks for sharing
and good luck in the conest
we both entered.
~Pastel
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"Colors splash across the sky,
Brilliance in itself makes you want to cry."
thi is totally my fav!!! it makes me think of sitting on the beaches in north carolina and staring at the sun setting.... i love how you used something that not many people would think of using... such as the "Cowboy duet" i believe it is a good way of expressing the sunset... keep up the great writes...
your little sister,
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though this whole write i love, its so peaceful and nice to read, my favorite lines were "Colors splash across the sky,
Brilliance in itself makes you want to cry." they made me think of what i say sometimes... its so beautiful it makes me want to cry... you know why true beauty makes you want to cry is because true beauty, something that is truly beautiful we know somewhere inside of ourselves... that we can never truly be that beautiful... that that beautiful sunset... or that beautiful whatever it is will always hold the perfectness that we strive for, but never reach... this is beautiful, thank you for sharing it
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Sunset is one of those recurring moments that never loses it's beauty no matter how often it's seen. You captured it perfectly leaving the readers imagination free to paint the perfect sunset. Well done.
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Wow..that old cowboy duet..can bring the melody in the environment..bringing the fire in the life..very well made poetic venture..thanks for sharing..
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This is so beautiful, it paints such a lovely picture in my mind. I love how you repeated the first stanza at the end, it really adds to the beauty and love of it all. Wonderful write, and good luck in the contest!!
Blessings,
~Michaela~
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aww my dear... thank you for such a sweet comment!!! I'm glad you like it!!
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This is really nice I love it very sweet good luck to you in her contest best wishes to you always be well
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thanks hun!!
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