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so tonight

so tonight we're going to drink
like we're going to jail in the morning
let's just forget the labels and their warnings

so tonight we're going to drink
our lives might be over before we blink

so tonight we're going out
flying down the streets we ride
at least until our pain subsides

so tonight we're going to drink
our lives might need some kind of link

so tonight we're going to bed
where we will do nothing but fuck
looking at each other star struck

so tonight we're going to drink
our lives might be over before we blink

Author notes

taking what is negative in life and saying i'm doing what i need to get over it.
even if these things are not looked at well, they might be what you need if
you don't want to try.

i will have to say to every one that this poem isn't about being weak.
but being strong, and realizing that life is short. you might not have
alot of time to get over the bad things.
so why not go have a good time, enjoy yourself, and get over your lost love at the same time.

if you think that this makes me a slut or a bad person, just read my other work.
i have wrote down every thing i have lived threw on this site.
so you should have an understanding before you brush me off as a weak person.

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Comments

  • raize
    February 6

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    fair 'nuff

    I'm missin out on the fuckin part these days, but I've always said that the solution to all of life's problems can be found at the bottom of a bottle....just maybe not this bottle.


  • Antiquated
    February 2

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    ... Alright, I thought about it for a while and really really wanted to talk about how bad this poem is, but I can't. I'll be honest, the premise is really stupid, but the way it's written is too well done to wreck. the repetition is a nice effect and the imagery is fairly well done. Just please, don't die of an overdose.


    • Deathless1
      February 2
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      overdose on what?
      all i say i'm doing is trying to fuck and drink my sorrows away.
      and i don't see how the premise could be stupid. i am guessing you don't know
      what it's like to have no way to get over the things that happen in life.
      some people might say just hurt until you move on. but personally i chose
      to get it out of my mind by having a good time.

      but i'm glad you like the way i write and flow, it's just to bad you don't like who i am.


  • dabpunx
    February 2

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    fuck yeah... live strong you know it. theres no one there but you and you. hehe some jamaican shit. but they say i and i.