Painting you from memory, I drew...
two hearts;
a flat line between them
nothing in the middle,
grows there… anymore.
Author notes
swiftness ---
A contest entry
- Swiftness by Ken-Maverick.
700 points, ended February 3, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Amaranthine Lover's Anniversary: by amaranthine lover.
2750 points, ended September 9, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 9 of 9
-
You don't need the word "anymore." It does nothing for this piece.
-
sad beautiful lines you share here. very good!
-
JUDGED!
Interesting take on the prompt poet/poetess
"a flat line between them
nothing in the middle,
grows there… anymore"
I like that, well done
All the best to you in the contest
Ken -
sad but yet so firm in words, good luck in his contest, looks like a good one to post a poem in
good luck
mm
-
great write
-
This is sad, beautiful
and brilliant
Lynda
-
awh! So sad is this broken hearted Valentine. http://www.mv2media6.com/bank/images/broken%20heart.jpg
-
So sad when love flatlines. It seems once it does nothing can resuscitate it. I have been there and it is never easy, not to go through and not to write.
-
I liked the flat line... that's where I went with this too, kinda. Well done.
Adding your comment:
1 - 9 of 9
