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I Smell Like A Banana Today!!! -Extended

I have recently noticed that I smell like a banana today;
Which would be cool, if all these monkeys went away!!!!

But, still, this is way, way better than last week,
When I smelled like peanuts, and elephants were after me.

Still, I'd take the elephants over the time when, two months ago,
I smelled like fish, and some cats were chasing me through the snow.

The cats were after me exactly a year after the day since,
I smelled royal, and was pursued by a creepy prince.

Even then, I'd choose the prince over the time a decade ago when,
I met a mummy, and I smelled like a savoury dinner to him.

The cool thing that came from all the different ways I smell,
Is knowing no one can beat me; I run VERY, VERY well!

Author notes

This is an extended verision of I Smell Like A Banana today; I wrote that one about a week ago. I wanted to see what would happen if I messed around, and made a small time chart in poetry form...if that makes any sense whatsoever. Anyways, please tell me what you think.

Please tell me what you think.

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • Beret55 silver member
    March 11, 2009

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    Just don't smell like fried chicken, you'll have a bunch of hairy legged redneck boys chasing you. hehe
    An intresting and difrent poim.. Very good..


  • Shyarn
    February 2, 2009

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    good

    though the mummy line kinda.. doens't fit as well? cuz you dont really smell like anything specific?