In the setting sun, and as the moon reaches it's limit;
The stars shine lustfully in my eyes.
Like weathered streets and fields of green,
After a midnights rain
I feel new and pure, and rushed with security.
If a storm with such depiction could prevail,
Then I would be the lightening bolt
And the frivolous hail.
I'll whisper in the moonlight, and count the hours till
The willowed trees and flower scented breeze
Can escape the comfort zone and create a new me.
I am the stars that shine,
The storm that stays and lasts for days.
As I echo in the hearts of the damned.
This is more then just romance,
I am an endless summer.
My heart will tend to freeze like winter,
If used and abused you would understand too.
All in all if you count the ways,
I'm a rainbow, a rainy night,
A cloudy day.
In the haze as clear as day,
I fought the thunder to become the flame.
Author notes
I am alll!!!
A contest entry
- Weathering The Storm... (3rd In Series, All Welcome) by Original Riddle.
700 points, ended February 20, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I am an endless summer.
My heart will tend to freeze like winter,
Wow... it started off a little...comme çi- comme ça (like this, like that. So-so) Normal.
But the last couple of lines packed a punch, literally took my breath away. Excellent work!!
And you are the flame. Wow. -
thank you very much
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this is really lovely, you have used so much great usage of words to depict your yourself, very well written. good luck with the contest
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loved this:
All in all if you count the ways,
I'm a rainbow, a rainy night,
A cloudy day.
In the haze as clear as day,
I fought the thunder to become the flame.
very well done!
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But I really do like it, it is a very emotive piece
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Great imagery! Well written. hey, come check ME out!
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amazing
this poem literally gave me goosebumps! i love it!! my fave part is
"My heart will tend to freeze like winter,
If used and abused you would understand too.
All in all if you count the ways,
I'm a rainbow, a rainy night,
A cloudy day.
In the haze as clear as day,
I fought the thunder to become the flame."
<3
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Great!
I like the way you compared yourself to nature. I also like the comparasing you did in the first lines. your poem is good. -
Although your poem suggests you are all weathers, I feel that the predominant you is wild, stormy weather, not the "frivolous hail". It is as though you are re-invented and re-animated from your "comfort zone" to the "flame". I believe that your sentiments and aspirations are spot on - we must all strive for that which inspires us, that which fires us or we become lethargic and lifeless. Well done. Tony
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