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The dance



We all were born and given life
And when it's time, we die.
There is only the dance
Of life in between to help
Make the world pass by
 

A contest entry

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  • Topnotchsy
    February 25

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    I like the message of this one. Short and sweet. Best of luck in the contest with it, it should do quite well.


    • rbruce gold member
      February 25

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      Many thanks once again. I like this one myself. It ame about after discussion with a friend about a cricket match. We both thought the players owuld be better as dancers.

  • amysticwriter silver member
    February 3
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    i must agree, good write...

    • rbruce gold member
      February 3
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      Life is a dance, so enjoy it, and dance. I appreciate your taking time to comment, and thank you for that.


  • Lillianna
    February 3

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    Nice

    I really like this, warm and uplifting piece of poetry.

    Life is a dance!

    Lilly


    • rbruce gold member
      February 3
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      Look at life as a dance, and enjoy it. Not always easy to do. Appreciate your commenting, thank you.


  • albymyheart gold member
    February 3

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    Sweet thoughts. And in the dance of life, may our toes be rarely trodden on! alby

    • rbruce gold member
      February 3
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      Heartfelt appreciation for your comments, Alby, and I must second your motion. My toes are such delicate extremeties.


      • albymyheart gold member
        February 3
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        Lol...you crack me up Bob.

        • rbruce gold member
          February 3
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          forgive me dear poet but my feet carry me around some strange places and i treasure them and their "delicate extremeties"


  • arafura gold member
    February 2
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    Very deep my friend. One of your most profound writes. Good luck in the contest!


    • rbruce gold member
      February 2
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      A great many thanks John. It seems my poetry has had a "gear change". I don't know why.

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