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Poetic Dream





Golden locks of hair
  caress my lips
  as he covers the negligent distance
    kissing
      like drops of strawberry
            tenderly dripping over my senses.

~a neurotic pulse
  understanding the need for emotion~

  His hands nervously grasp me
    pulling me into an abyss
    that no longer remembers anything.
  I hear it too
    the song that he sings for me
    ...its soft solemn meloday
                rythmic to our breathing.

He places me in his arms
  whispering in my ear
      cuddling
  ~never wanting to let go~

His incense sets my soul
  through a endless journey
    where doors made of crystal
      and windows speak of innocence.

  Slowly, the night draws near...
    ...but the canvas waits
          affectionately for its masterpiece
                  to be showcased 
              in the star's poetic dream.





           
     

Author notes

I actually suck at love poems, so sorry if you dont like it!

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  • Spiritual Soul gold member
    February 5

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    This doesn't suck! This is beautiful, i love it, such beautiful imagery and emotion in this piece. Wonderfully written, wonderful job! Congrats on the trophy!! It's well deserved.
    Blessings,
    ~Michaela~


  • Jaffa-
    February 4

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    I really enjoyed this. It was a really great write. The choice of wording was amazing and the flow perfect. However, it breaks one of my rules. Very soory but thanks so much for the amazing write. xo


  • Winged Unicorn
    February 3

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    Lovely

    I really like the imagery within this emotion. It's very raw and beautifully honest. One thing though the word melody is misspelt. Other than that it was simply exquisite. Very lovely


  • couldbeworse
    February 3

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    Slowly, the night draws near...
    ...but the canvas waits
    affectionately for its masterpiece
    to be showcased
    in the star's poetic dream.

    loved this ending. piece was superb.


  • TheSpiralGenerator
    February 3

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    You don't suck at all! You shush.
    This is an amazing love poem, exactly what type of poem I was looking for in this contest. It's just so sweet! Thank you so much for entering, and good luck!

    Blessed Be,
    -Sadien


  • untouched pages
    February 3

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    all i have to say is hush.. hun you are an amazing poet.. so stop putting your work down.. this is an amazing love write!! dont make me come down there and smirf kick you( flick you lol ) lol I love this write.. I hope you win!!

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