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My Candle Burns

Alone in the dark, like a lover
one quiet place quells my soft cover
forever clinging shadow of light
never to sing above tranquil flight

I rise I fall, I take it all
I spin, I bend, to find an end
I slip, I stand, my feet I land
I lift, I turn, my candle burns

Over and through I look for a clue
hiding in colors of deepened blue
from the top to ground, all but unfound
under the outside, beneath the ground

I rise I fall, I take it all
I spin, I bend, to find an end
I slip, I stand, my feet I land
I lift, I turn, my candle burns

Within I win, casting off my sin
without a shout, I can move about
with what I know, I do try to grow
sometimes it's very hard, as you know

I rise I fall, I take it all
I spin, I bend, to find an end
I slip, I stand, my feet I land
I lift, I turn, my candle burns

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Darkwell

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  • Amera gold member
    March 27

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    This is a delight to recite aloud! What a great idea to write a rhyming quatrain with a refrain, all in Ballard meter. Good luck when I judge this contest.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • vaseline
    February 16

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    now this! i like! it rolled off my tongue like butter. i used to be able to rhyme, then something snapped in my brain and i cant seem to do it anymore lol. this is great


  • darell
    February 15

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    Excellent!

    An emotional write that takes us
    into a intimate journey of the
    human experiences. We all have
    these struggles which hopefully
    makes us much stronger.
    A very poignant and inspirational poem.
    Blessings and Love


  • troyias
    February 2

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    Love it!!!!!

    Beautiful. well writth with an amazing flow. The rhyme perfece. Full of emotion and lush rythem. Well done.

    *Go with God* my child,

    Grandma Valerie

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    February 2

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    As always you did a great job kiddo good luck to you in the contest best wishes always be well


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    February 2

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    nice

    I love the way you talk about being in the dark then you go into detail about the candle. It was a pleasure to read your work.


  • Salty Hibiscus gold member
    February 1

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    cool write. the rhyming scheme you penned is double cool, too. thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.

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