Forgetting all that was and is to come,
we stepped unsure upon the trodden path:
abandoning our childhood trail of crumbs,
Chuck Taylor’s for ties, and Seuss for Plath.
Author notes
"Forgetting all that was and is to come,
we" is from Ken-Maverick. I may turn this into a longer poem. Tell me what you think!
A contest entry
- 1 hour swiftness by Ken-Maverick.
400 points, ended February 2, 2009, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Thoughts?
Comments
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This is a beautiful transition from child to adult.
Not only in nursery rhyme, but in poetry.
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Just browsing poems and came across yours. I really liked it!
Very nicely written with excellent flow.
You have a wonderful unique way of writing and I thouroughly enjoyed this piece.
If I had to pick my favourite part was:
"abandoning our childhood trail of crumbs"
Very clever = ]
Keep up the excellent writing!!
--Stardust xx
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JUDGED!!!
This is wonderful, "chuck taylors for ties"
hahaha, that brought me a smile. Clever!!
I would love to see a full version of this.
All the best to you
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Very good write I couldn't think on this one you hit it.
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thanks so much! The superbowl inspire me lol. My team is winning.
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awesome take on this prompt, I really liked what you did with this!
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THanks! It was a very good prompt.
Best,
El
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Very interesting. I really liked the third line:
we stepped unsure upon the trodden path:
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thanks so much!
Best,
El
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