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let you feel me

Turn out the lights,
lay on your bed,
and close your eyes....

if you're lucky you''ll feel it
if you're lucky you'll feel me
cuz im there from your heart ill emit
my signal....
              .....my static love for you

how do i know its there?
'cuz i feel you, look at my picture
take it in your hand and stare
through your heart's mind i'll reach you

just focus baby, but not too much
just focus and you'll know when its right
let your mind wander till you feel my touch
and let me take you to the stars...

Turn out the lights,
lay on your bed,
and close your eyes....

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what did it make you feel?

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  • Treasure 5 gold member
    February 2

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    wow

    Wonderfully written, Very nice flow of words. I love the detail work here. My favorite line is, If your lucky you will feel it. It was a very pleasurable read.


  • Kathraina silver member
    February 1
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    Judged-ola!

    a very tender write