Haunted by memories that have no escape
the image taunts me in dreams
Unable to rest, nowhere to hide
I walk away with tears in my eyes
Finding myself where you forever lay
alone on the bench feeling insane
where the sad people wait
Scarred by the grim reapers trade
your not coming home though you still cry
I'm soaked with your tears that wash away mine
Free me from this pain as I mourn
guide me, make things right
I can't handle anymore pain
not now not tonight
I am being torn apart deep inside
Come find me where you forever lay
I'm alone on the bench going insane
where the sad people wait
Is this an illusion? your not really here
only a ghost rapture greeting my fear
as you fade away I whisper I love you
forever alone on the bench, insane
infront of the grave where you'll forever lay
where the sad people wait.
A contest entry
- Just A Memory. by BadBlood.
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What did you think
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an interesting write. I liked it. I would only make one suggestion to separate it into paragraphs or stanzas. Other than that. Great job. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering this into my contest.
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The dark genre fits your poetic voice very well. I think the repitition seperated this poem from prose and fits quite well. Good luck with in the judging.
Amera,
Moderator Appointed Judge
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You are an amazing and talented writer your work rocks
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Very dark and emotional words here.
Wonderful work putting this one together.
I really enjoyed reading it! All the best to you
with it here!
Jeremy0826 -
Well done. The repetition of lines confused me a bit but nonetheless, a write beautifully done. You could have improved on the description of the place which I believe is a cemetery. The way the names of the ones who have gone ahead were written on their tombstones, the faces of those who wait the way you have. Descriptions like that. One more correction, you confuse Your with You're which is a common mistake among all writers. So, don't sulk because of it. Good luck in the contest.
Welcome to the finals.
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i can imagine how hard it is to feel those kind of feelings. dark and sad. thanks for sharing and good luck.
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