On a cold, dark, and dreary night,
There was a heart once full of light.
As warm and wondrous as a summer's day,
But now the glitter has faded away.
Replaced by hatred and long-stemming deceit,
A shining star unable to comprehend defeat.
Once full of trust for all those around,
Now bitter and hard where trust cannot be found.
For if you come across this heart,
Remember how quickly lives fall apart.
When all that's required is love and kindness,
Society turns away in absolute blindness.
So stick to your morales and twisted truths,
Pretend the pain repents the innocence of youths.
Because when everything is said and done,
You look around and then there were none.
I could really use help coming up with a title for this poem.
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a sad realization of life viewed through the eyes of someone who is unsure of people and their intent, i enjoyed this piece x
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Blinding stars
Blinding stars sounds about right for this poem but that's just me! ^^ Anyway this poem was heart felt and heartbreaking at the same time. You show true feelings that can any persons heart. You did a very good job on this, and I have to say well done. Yours words are true and very sweet but dark and meaningful at the same time. -
wow this is great wes i envy you. you have so much talent its amazing
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i love this mainly cuz i see myself in it in a way. wonderful
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thankyou :-)
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Great piece Wes.
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Search and you shall find for the times are hard yet if one does look beyond what it is they keep closest to thier hearts they will see that there is still some good in this sea of inhumanity.
I like it, I like it so!
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There is both power and truth in your words. You have described a situation that seems to be so relevant right now in our society. We do not seem to care anymore.
You did a great job expressing your feelings.
Soulful Woman
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Hay Bro. I like your work
nice flow, sad but well writ. for a title try "looking for the light"
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omg that was really good i think it should be called the unknow love bt idk it just sound really good to me.
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Gorgeous.
Love the way you have not only potrayed the emotions, but have actually painted this bleak, dark yet painfully beautiful picture.
"So stick to your morales and twisted truths,
Pretend the pain repents the innocence of youths." loved this part....
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hmmm... . i'd call it Lost to Darkness.... great job
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i really really like this one baby, ive been thinkin for you, and maybe call it, "a forgotten darkness" because its kinda like something is being forgotten, and your walking into the darkness, not able to see what is happening.... ok.. so that made no sense... but i kinda liked the title lol....
ill keep thinking.... love you <3
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wow this poem is very powerful with great words and i love the rhyme scheme for a title i was thinking As Of 2/1/09 (but i suck at making titles so..........) but great poem
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