If death had a face
how would it look?
If death had lips
would it learn to smile?
If death had ears
Would it listen to my worries?
If death had hands
would it lend a helping hand?
if death had legs
would it run to help?
if death had a heart
would it like and love?
If death had a brain
would it think for good
So many if's
I wonder why
But we must face the fact that
Death is all around us
Coming out when it likes to and
hiding when it needs to
Striking at the wrong moments
and standing alone when it is meant to be
Death you are a clever villian
Many worship you
yet many try to stay as far away from you as they can
What we need to do is to show death
That he can't win
That he can't take advantage of us
We will rule the world
Our hearts raised above others
We need to smile
For death
Author notes
This is just a draft
i need advice
Thnx
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Comments
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thank you for entering and good luck in the contest with this very good write
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this is exactly the kind of thingim looking for not too depressing but hopeful and inspirational
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this is much better...much more inspirational and dedicative
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Hmmm...I like this...it is a great write..but it seems kind of harsh for a dedication..(I mean the ending...) unless I am just looking at it wrong...could you offer some insight?
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i think it works the way u have writen it... it is nicly peiced together, the flow is easy to understand
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i really liked this
&& the ending just wraps it all up
cuz life is the way it is and we should get used to what it brings to us
great write
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i like this one i totally agree
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I really liked it
the end was great, you should definitely keep the end, it wrapped the whole poem together, great job, *two thumbs up*
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Thanx i think ill keep the ending
Sparklez
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love it
i love this i love death and death is all around us and keep up the good work!!!!
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Hmmm i really like the idea behind this, however i'm not sure if i like the whole beginning rhyme scheme... it kind of interrupts the flow, and i think it would work better if you dropped the repetitive line. i really do like this poem though, and i think it holds a lot of potential!!!! keep up the good work
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thanx 4 the comment nd i did wat u said
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Much better, it's a great piece!!!
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