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Once Again

I am between logic and passion
My sudden desire to destroy anything near me
My certainty that this would not improve the situation

Twice again, I fight for an illusion
It taunts me, wins me
It vanishes upon acquisition

Thrice again, I ignore the world for a liar
They shamed me with their reason
They always knew the truth

Four times I lost myself in another
Four times, she was never there at all

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  • Mrs.Shadow
    February 2
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    wow.. great poem.. i can relate.. unfortunatly.. im sorry.. but they say you always have a perfect match out there..mayb shes in china =] lighten up though..when you look for love it becomes generic..just go with the flow..you dont always need somebody..im realizing that..keep your eyes open..let your friends watch your back..she'll come along..amazing poem..


  • ChelseySmile
    February 1
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    This is not emo. I liked it a lot. ;] I also liked how she wasn't mentioned until the end.

  • Wyvern
    February 1

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    Words of advice - If you want to know if a girl truely likes you, take your perception and enter into someone elses eyes. If the girl still shines just as brightly, than she does. However, if in this other perception you realize that she treats (you) or (your friends) negatively than you can truely see the side of her that you cannot see normally. Quite a daunting task, I know, but well worth it. As for the poem, I really liked how you didn't mention the other person until the last line of the poem.


    • Rin
      February 2
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      thanks for the advice and feedback
      ill keep that in mind


  • karma-n-peace
    February 1

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    Emo? Not! Human experience...definately.
    Although it's cliche to say this, it's truth:
    The heart wants what it wants.
    Many of us might not ever learn LOL.
    The write itself is great! Awesome form and punctuation, perfect spelling (as far as my non english M.D. knowledge can see LOL)
    Much applause!

    • Rin
      February 1
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      thanks much for your feedback. i just kinda threw this together today so im glad there's no spelling blunders haha


  • Jacob S. Steadman
    February 1

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    Profound and interesting

    I can relate to this in my own personal way (which is the best way with poetry I think) Keep up the good work and keep on telling your truth.


  • Emms17
    February 1

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    wow
    deep and true
    I liked it and I liek how is set. Its really good
    four times? thats harsh and I know whats its like
    but great poem
    great great job


    • Rin
      February 1
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      thanks for your feedback and sympathy

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