Everyday we realize
We're trapped in a pitiful world
Everybody says they want to get out
But when death faces them down
They run and hide in fear
I'm at a loss for words
I look around and ask
Where is love?
I'm appalled at the show of no mercy
From Christians
And amazed at the kindness
Of sinners
I'm at a loss for words
What the hell is this place?
Captured in confusion
My mind races
And I beg to God to let me go
But run like everyone else
Saying
I have too much to live for
I'm at a loss for words
Even I disgust myself
But I'm caught in the rituals
Of everyone else
The current of the world
Is dragging me in
And I can't escape
I'm at a loss for words
And then I am gone
Breathing no more
For the current has taken the life from me
I am but an empty shell
At a loss for words
Author notes
not sure if this sounds good or not, but it's how I feel a lot.
February 1, 2009
A contest entry
- round one (for everyone) prewrite contest ENTER ENTER ENTER (AND YES THAT MEAN'S YOU too by serenity silvermoon.
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Comments
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I'm appalled at the show of no mercy
From Christians
And amazed at the kindness
Of sinners
I really love those lines. Great observations throughout the entire poem! Well done! Thanks for entering my contest. Good luck. It’s an honor to have you show your work here!
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If this was set to music, it would make a very contempary Blues song. "I'm caught in the rituals", and the repetition of "I'm at a loss for words" carries the theme throughout.
Patty
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