Unto thee I hand you my life,
Do with it what you want,
I’m going into the other side,
Take me to your perfect moment,
Into this fire and brimstone,
Drunk on demon slobber,
Stumble forth into this perfect punishment,
Awaken thy mind and see your true leader,
Pass the torch into your eyes,
Burn them out as you scream into the nightmare,
Crawl out of your skin and look him in the eyes,
Torment me again, torment me once more,
Lie and smile as you draw me in,
Draw me into hell again,
Take me out of my mind and enter it,
So you may experience this so-called heaven,
With the help of the angels,
Throw away your halo into the fire,
As you mingle with the dead, skinless creatures,
Dance around the fire and kneel in his countenance,
Be swept into the same deception I fell victim to,
Weep the same tears many before me have wept,
As you try to understand the small minds of sheep,
Men and women see red over gravity,
Over the seasons and the sky,
Yet they do nothing and lack reasoning,
Reason with a gun as your crown falls,
I offer you nothing, look into my eyes,
As envy clouds your mind,
Take me in and heal me only to kill me,
I choose to live, yet it matters only to none,
Pass me into the arms of the Reaper,
Into the ravaged land of the living,
Pull me in and out, side to side,
As I’m jerked about by this,
Abomination that’s been granted,
To live in this land that we call a paradise,
I ask you to answer in the light of conviction,
This one question: What have we become?
Author notes
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A contest entry
- The Mystery Lyric Prompt Contest (No.3) by Glasyalabolas.
1400 points, ended February 12, 2009, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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good poem, i liked it. thanks for entering and good luck
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Very good. It was descriptive, sad and hopeless. Good nonetheless.
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This is a wonderful poem
Favorite lines:
"Abomination that’s been granted,
To live in this land that we call a paradise,
I ask you to answer in the light of conviction,
This one question: What have we become?"
Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest
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• if you would please space your name out in your AN like this : X x D r o w n . M e . D r y X x . Just out a space between each of your letters. Please. If you chose not to thats fine but i would like you you give me a reason.
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this one is just amazing, im practically speechless, you seem like one of the few people on this planet thats actually self aware.
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There is very strong wording in this piece, giving it a great power and flow. The imagery and the thoughts are excellent due to this, good read with some good messages contained within, though again, with the wording, these can vary dependant on the viewpoint of the reader.
Good write and congrats on bronze.
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I think this is...wonderful, more morbid and dark/depressing than your usually write.
But, I think this is amazing.
Metaphors, and wording is perfect.
Great imagery, -
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thank you foar reading!
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No problem, Lyric Prompt No.2 is:
“Lies - Your crown is falling
I offer fantasy
And you, you creator are
Blind with envy” – from ‘God Of Emptiness’ by Morbid Angel
Many thanks.
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