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Tender Wolf

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She gave to me a sacred thing,
From a tribal reservation;
A feather from a spirits wing.

A gift that caused my soul to sing
And she earned my admiration.
She gave to me a sacred thing,

With a love and strength increasing,
She’s the mother of creation.
A feather from a spirits wing.

She saved my soul from wandering,
She’s the mother of adoration.
She gave to me a sacred thing.

I now have one to whom I cling,
She keeps me from temptation.
A feather from a spirits wing.

She accepted me within her ring
And into the Cheyenne nation.
She gave to me a sacred thing;
A feather from a sprits wing.

 

 

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Option: G

Dedicated to my AP Mom TwilightPanther; She gave me a Cheyenne name and treats me like a blood daughter. She’ll always be Tender Wolf to me.
Nemehotatse Mom

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  • Purrsanthema
    February 23, 2009

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    Wonderful poem! I've always been intimidated by this form. The typo piskie's still gotcha! Second to the last word. Also, if the wing belongs to the spirits, there ought to be an apostrophe denoting ownership. I don't know where it goes in this case, not knowing anything about the tradition : is the idea singular as in a spirit wing? Then the ' would go after the t, but if it is always conceived of as belonging to all of the spirits, the ' should go after the s. The repetition of those two lines so beautifully expresses the sense of astonishment and appreciation you felt.


  • jcat gold member
    February 12, 2009

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    A very moving tribute to a most wonderful lady....As always you make form seem to easy when I know it is not! Truly beautiful....


  • Ithica silver member
    February 11, 2009

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    It's a wonderful feeling to be accepted and anchored by tradition. You have written a wonderful tribute to the sacred spirit of motherhood... and in Villanelle form!!!


  • Tirrell
    February 7, 2009

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    Beautiful villanelle and doubly so with the info of your notes. A heartwarming and lovly tribute, I love the imagery you have deftly penned within.
    Well done!!!


  • maa gold member
    February 5, 2009

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    a truly heartfelt and very touching tribute to tender wolf ... I just love the form you used and the gentle words to praise her qualities ... your gratitude for her blessings is humbly and lovingly expressed ...

    I am happy to hear that her presence in your life keeps your soul from wondering and maybe also from wandering ...

    there's no place like home ...

    much love,
    marion


    • Amera gold member
      February 5, 2009
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      LOL, I love it! You found a typo! Thanks so much sis!


      • jcat gold member
        February 7, 2009
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        Unless I am mistaken in line 9, 15, and 19 you have sprits instead of spirits? Another typo??

      • maa gold member
        February 5, 2009
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        I love this kind of "freudian" typos ...


  • cup-a-joe silver member
    February 1, 2009

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    Amera,

    This is just simply beautiful. That's the best way I know to describe it.
    I love every word.
    Joe


  • StarEyes
    February 1, 2009

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    What more is there to say? This is amazing, and every word of this is over the top! You out did yourself on this one! I love it!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Wandika gold member
    February 1, 2009

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    Very nice

    I too was adopted but into the Souix Nation. Wandika is the name given me.

    Very nice tribute.

    Jim

  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    February 1, 2009

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    Outstanding

    Wow!!!
    Both a wonderful Villanelle and a beautiful dedication
    Your words flow so smoothly and speaks from the heart.
    Wish you the very best
    Much love and many blessings
    David


  • Desire gold member
    February 1, 2009

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    Precious!!

    Wow~ You know while I was reading Your words- I kept being pulled to the right- like pulled from my chair as if come with me- Oh My~
    Love this Beautiful and what a Treasured Gift indeed~ You both are Gems in my eyes
    Adore this form~ penned flawlessly- Gosh You have Inspired me to try this~
    Keep that quill dancing~ Woot!
    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Voice~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
    Best wishes in the contest too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • dame de la riviere
    February 1, 2009

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    Nice, easy to read, modern diction with a distinctly classic style...an interesting combination, perhaps this is the way to earn a broader, more universal readership. You did a fine job with the form. , Dannie
    P.S. I mentioned you at an academic conference this weekend; I red the shadow sonnet that I had written and before reading it I explained who invented the form and told them to look you up through Google...just a bunch of Ph.d. holders and poetry writers/critics...but thought I'd give you a cheer.


    • Amera gold member
      February 1, 2009
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      Wow! You did? Will you link me to your Shadow Sonnet? I want to read, comment and post it in my Shadow Sonnet list. That list is readily accessed on Google.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    February 1, 2009
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    wow

    so looving and sweetly penned! excellent my friend and of course i expect nothing less from you..


  • jinsays gold member
    February 1, 2009

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    Always wonderful to read you Amera.
    What a lovely tribute to someone you admire.
    Love it.
    jin

  • Whispering Wind gold member
    February 1, 2009

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    SOFT TEARS FLOWING

    My Little Blue Star I am so honored by your tender words of praise and please know that within my heart you will always remain... You are my Cheyenne Daughter and alway will be

     

    nemehotatse na little hesta

     

    your mom


  • cricketjeff gold member
    February 1, 2009

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    Beautifully wrought Villanelle with an enticing, non-traditional, meter. The feminine rhyme of the "b" lines gives a different twist to the scheme, the personal and "spirited" tale add still more to the poetry.

    Great stuff, and a great use for a Villanelle.



    Jeff

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