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His Eyes

Missing image
His eyes
  were a  t
                r
                  a
                    p

to my  heart ,

Once I gazed into their
liquid depths
I was w r a p p e d up into
his

soul.

_ never set free again ...

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Prompt: Trap (26 words)

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  • Heva Feva
    June 9

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    Beautiful dp. Lovely and short, yet so much emotion trapped in it. Good luck and thanks for entering my contest.
    -heva


  • Luciferschild
    February 5

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    interesting to say the least. the word choice was pristine and dare i say perfect? i really have no criticisms about this. thank you for entering and good luck


  • Shakes-spear
    February 3

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    very nice

    This is a feeling many know, but few can write about it well! Good job and Good luck in the contests, The Shaker


  • Wolfdog silver member
    February 2

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    Superb

    Ah, 'tis a fine write, indeed. I like the format that you have used here. It adds meaning, and depth to your poem.


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    February 1

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    Captivating words...I love the form in which you wrote this. The pic is amazing with your words. You conveyed your message very well with poetic grace.


    Az


  • Rhythm Child
    February 1

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    liquid depths
    love it i always liked to think of a persons eyes being like.....a lake of blue or ocean green or like there own little pools of their soul
    great write


  • Emerald-Eyes
    February 1

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    Simple yet so effective. The feeling of being so wrapped up in someone else really comes through

    xx

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