I am crying upon a pillow full of doubt
I wear a bage of failure
upon a heart breaking throughout
It is just not the same any more
something is not right
I am lonley in a room full of a hundred people
I am drowning in heart broken cries
I am starving for perfection
in a world that only sees sin
I am purging calories down the sink
just to be in control again
I am climbing a montain
of stress filled peaks
I am slowly falling down again
my mind has become weak
I am giving into everything
and everyone around me
I am curling into a ball in the corner
wishing some one would help me
I am hugging myself
because no one person truly cares
I am falling
falling fast
into a hole of self despair
I am bleeding on the out
just to kill the things on the in
I am blinded by my failure
I am out of control again
I am losing myself in everything
wishing my needs were met
praying upon a ground of nothing
making mistakes I will soon regret
when all I truly wanted was to know
that some one truly cared
that I wasnt really lonley
that I didnt have to be scared
all I want is to be accepted
to be loved
to be understood
but I am so far away from perfect
and I know as loud as I scream
I will never be heard...
In a list
A contest entry
- Sad, Upset, Hurt, Betrayed? by starving4perfection.
1550 points, ended April 26, 157 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
please give me your honest opinion. I will return the favor a.s.a.p thanks.
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I think this poem is great.
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thanks alot for your comment i appreciate it! best of luck to you in the future and with your writing.
andi
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Wow this is a great write. The emotion of it is so very strong all the way through to the end. So very sad and painful. Best of luck in the contest.
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I am impressed with this write, you nearly always write such strong poetry, and here another one gets the thumbs up. Although there are mistakes here, ( you spelt lonely, twise wrong. ) But one can easily overlook that error, for here you've done an amazing write. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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Wow...Im speechless...This was just amazing
Yet so sad...I can feel the emotion and pain in this write, And i hope you're okay
A brilliant write done to perfection! Keep the pen going
Tash. x
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thanks for your comment I truly appreciate it. best of luck to you in the future and with your writing.
andi
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I enjoyed this write especially the part,
"I am climbing a montain
of stress filled peaks"
It makes me think not only of mountains to over come but of home, with stress relating to home life and for some reason the comment about peaks makes me think of baking. It created some quite powerful imagery. well done x -
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thanks so much for your comment I truly appreciate it very much. best of luck to you in the future and with your writing.
andi
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omg....!!! that was soo....i cant even find the word!
friggin master piece!! i can relate to that so much its scary!
"I am starving for perfection
in a world that only sees sin
I am purging calories down the sink
just to be in control again -- its like them words came out of my own mouth! im sorry your feeling like that too...its heartbreaking so many amazing people are!
"I am climbing a montain
of stress filled peaks
I am slowly falling down again
my mind has become weak"
i hope you get better soon...u can talk to me whenever you need a shoulder i care about you
thank you so much for entering such a great piece...one of the best defo a favourite! good luck!
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thanks so very much for your comment I truly appreciate it entirly it made me smile. best of luck to you in the future and with your writing.
andi
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