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Better or Worse: the habit of

Calloused connection between flesh burns as
Distant bodies reveal honest resentment.
Excited love evolved through years, creating
Mechanical regurgitation of endearments.

Pseudo fatigue and headaches concieve absences
To intimate exchanges of husband and wife.

A bored exsistance of 'Happily Ever After'
Directs them to seek the comfort of...

Ignorance: an appreciated choice.

Author notes

Light #2.
Seperation between them except for holding one anothers hand.
Love loses it's initial excitement leaving only the truly dedicated surviving. Illusion of walking off into a sunset has a feel of
'the end'.

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AP Name is Knickerdew

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  • Classic Crayons
    March 15

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    "Mechanical regurgitation of endearments." was a wonderful line.
    "A bored exsistance of 'Happily Ever After'"
    was as well
    along with "Ignorance: an appreciated choice."
    the tone underscored throughout this was by far- artful. amazing. it made me almost giddy.


    • karma-n-peace
      March 15
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      Thanks! This was a picture prompt and so it's kind of hard to understand without seeing the pic.


  • whitenoise
    February 3

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    a strong write here with a sense of sorrowful dissapointment
    " mechanical regurgitation of endearments"
    a brilliant line here, the blissfull times of first day love does often turn into this sour and repetative notion, i loved the last line
    " ignorance; an appreciated choice"
    this sets of this whole poem for me and a brilliant way of putting something that is so true
    very well done
    white


    • karma-n-peace
      February 3
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      Thanx, you definately read what I was attempting to convey. Always appreciated.

  • Topnotchsy
    February 1

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    This is a really interesting and thought provoking poem. I found myself reading through the first couple of lines a bunch of times. Nice write, best of luck in the contest.


    • karma-n-peace
      February 3
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      Thank you for such a great comment...
      The first stanza is my favorite.

  • SoulWhispher
    February 1

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    Great contest entry, you have written a most though provoking poem, I really enjoyed this read, great Job, blessings with love John

  • the evil angel
    February 1

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    Very creative. I really like this.

    Little side note, there should most likely be a period at the end of the second line otherwise it'll be a run-on.

    But that is something very small. I really like this poem in general. Well done.


    • karma-n-peace
      February 1
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      LOL. Thanks for the tip
      I fixed the puncuation ( not my strongest point )
      Thanks for the comment as well...

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