Sitting by my window
Looking out at the rain
Got a bottle of whiskey
Trying to drown out the pain.
I know that I hurt you
I admit I was wrong
But I still cant believe
That you're really gone
Don't ask why I cheated
Don't ask why I lied
But the reality hit me
When you broke down and cried.
How could I have been so selfish
To risk all that we had
Because I really do love you
And that is truly sad.
I don't have any excuses
No one else is to blame
Now Im left here to wallow
In all of my shame.
I know you don't believe me
That I love only you
Is there anything I can say
Anything I can do?
We had dreams together
To share a lifetime,
Now its all shattered
And that is a crime.
One that Im guilty of
And Im paying the price
With an empty bed
And a heart turned to ice.
Know that you were perfect
In each and every way
And without you Im miserable
I suffer day after day.
So, here I sit
Trying to drown my sorrow
I'll pass out and start
All over again tomorrow.
Know that I wish I could
Do us all over again..
But I can't and I accept
That for us this is the end.
Author notes
If it's meant to last it will at any cost.
A contest entry
- Not So Happily Ever After (Romeo And Juilet) by HereComesTheSun.
950 points, ended February 13, 31 entries
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Do you feel this is to simple or do you feel in its simplicity, the pain that was felt
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awsome write. lots of emotion here. to the point but not boring. it kept my attentiona nd me wanting to read further to understand. keep it up adn hoepfully things get better. you every need someone to talk to im here....
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NICE LOVE IT EXPESIALY THE RHYME
TOTALLY AWSOME VERY COOOOOLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Welcome Aajdj ! Thank you for taking the time out to read my pieces. I definitely appreciate your comments and critiques any time. the good, the bad and the indifferent.
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i liked this and i thought it had alot of genuine feeling. it was pretty sad but i loved it nevertheless. it makes me happy when i see a poem as good as this and you know how to use words and how to express your feelings very well. i think some of the rhyming could be improved, not much, only a little. overall i thought this was very good. =)
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Great write...
wonderful piece. simple but not so siple that the reader can't connect with the feelings behind the piece. well done.
Sitting by my window
Looking out at the rain
Got a bottle of whiskey
Trying to drown out the pain.
-I connected with this.
Loved the saying inthe author notes as well.
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first of all i really loved the saying in your author notes becuase i cling to that of this day. i really enjoyed this and i thought the rhyming was really good but yet the end did not do the poem justice. thanks for entering and good luck
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You are absolutely right!
I did a revision on that last verse. I really appreciate the feedback. Thank you so much.
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