Imagine a child waking up everyday
unhappy that she is still alive
cause when her parents beat her
she dies a little more inside.
Imagine what its like for her
to have her dad be so mean
that he just hurts her more
for every little thing.
Imagine what it must be like
for that helpless little girl
that instead of her being alive
she'd rather be out of this world.
Just have a little think now
about the little children of today
how they are being treated and
what they go through everyday.
A contest entry
- A Call to Action by Backporchphilosopher.
700 points, ended February 4, 2009, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - [Contest] Wake up to Abuse - Prewrites Welcome by Shari-Lei.
700 points, ended February 8, 2009, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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This is a heartbreaking write, the words just roll into your heart and make you ache.
Shari
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great poem...abuse hurts in so many ways not just physical but mental too. I would know my dad was a domestic abuser, or close. he's word hurt more than his fist...sorry.
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points for great write!!!!!!
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nice write
to place the reader in the head and heart of the abused child...emotive and powerful with good rhyming; delicate not graphic but still with strong message. Thanks for entering! -
wow
this is an amazing piece
it's like a call to action to wake up and realize what's going on
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This is so true!
This is sad as can be! Probly next to some of the sadest ive read. An award winner in my eyes good job! Nice picture choice too.
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wow great write... very sad
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This poem is so sad, but so meaningful and this brings out awareness to a very awful thing that needs to be rid of in this world. Because no child deserves to be treated this way. Anyway great write and good luck in the contest
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dark but poignant
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very powerful
Really liked this one, so powerful and yet true in todays world...
love it!
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Perfect rhyme and form and such a sad situation.
This is more than "okay"...
It's heartfelt in provoking thought on an evil action of abuse.
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A sad and passionately written poem , very
Touching and right from the heart !
Best wishes ! Friend Easy
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I really like how you wrote this, and the idea of it. It is so sad that this happens to so many kids and it makes you think of how things could be worse and not to feel sorry for yourslef because things like this are happening everyday.
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That is a beautifully conceptualised poem. Your care and concern for those being abused is very deep, a powerful and well written piece. 2nd line should be 'that' rather than 'they' . I believe line 11 was meant to be 'alone' great write though sister.
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