Between us hung the words I rashly spoke,
That all a kingdom’s wealth could not recall,
One moment’s slip, and there they were, afloat,
More cruel than I’d dreaded might befall.
It’s not enough to almost hold them in,
For I’ve a tongue to vie with Sol for heat.
I can’t unwind the world and try again,
A strand of time, once woven, stays complete.
I puff more words aloft, a final try
To disalign the ones I sent before,
But their effect I only magnify,
And sink their barbs in flesh but all the more.
Worst wounds we cause when we unleash our spite,
For nothing makes such flaming arrows right.
Author notes
Awww, my very first sonnet. Now I feel all special. Same as always. 
For Those Who Never Knew and for Those Who Have Forgotten - "Sol" is, in theory, the name of the sun. Usually, the sun is just called "The Sun," but "Sol" shows up on astronomical maps from time to time.
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Well, I'll be honest and say I'm unsure what a sonnet looks like, but I liked this
Tthanks for entering and best of luck to you
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I agree: this is very impressive for a first sonnet! Please write more! This is elegant and thoughtful!
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I'm impressed if this is your first sonnet. They are not as easy to write as they look. You are right about 'Sol', I'm fairly sure it is the Latin for sun.
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I must congratulate you for a very well done sonnet. Much better than I could write. it has the lilt and the music as sonnets should have.
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Technically brilliant
I wish I had the self discipline to write sonnets this good, unfortunately I don't and never will so I will have to carry on reading other peoples.
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This is a mighty fine sonnet. First sonnet or hundredth...I think it is good! This is a confession that most can relate too and you are quite right...nothing makes such flaming arrows right! Well done!
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Like fish hooks - you have to push them through and cut the barb.
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you did this very well, especially for your first time. i want to thank you for sharing the beauty of your words with me tonight. looking forward to more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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