Mushroom clouds became the city
the dark grey of a rainy sky colored the smoke
suffocating the people of the city.
A people burned in the fires
for their crimes of their leaders;
fumes brought Leukemia to haunt survivors
who would pay a price more costly
then never forgetting.
On that day- a new era was born
the ability kill masses of people
and destroy whole cities became
reality.
On August 9th, 1945- Nagaski burned
An era of bombs dropping became
the future that is our present,
and that didn't exist in their past.
Forty eight years from then
I was born- on the anniversary
of the atomic bomb.
Author notes
Bomb dropping on Nagaski
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Wooww... this really struck to my heart. The title intrigued me, as someone close to my heart is also born of August 9th 1993, and I had no idea that was the anniversary of the bomb being dropped on Nagasaki. I love the imagery in this, you can almost see and hear the scene unfolding in front of you. This was most definitely amazing, beautiful and heart wrenching.
I wish you the best of luck, and keep writing and improving your poetry. ^__^
Aeris Silverlight
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I like the personal touch at the end and the mixing of the past and present and future 'the future that is our present / and didn't exist in their past' it really makes you think of a time when such things would have been inconcievable to most people.
I'm not sure if the repetition of 'city' in the first stanza is deliberate but to me personally it made it seem a little unwieldy but other than that the poem flows very well.
One more thing, just a slight note. I think you may have meant 'the ability to kill' rather than just 'the ability kill' :-).
A moving poem, good luck in the contest. -
Oh goodness, such an important date i history, one which the world will never forget.
Hopefully a date and event which the world will learn so much from and hopeflully never repeat.
Well written o such a tragic subject.
Good luck in the contest and thank you for entering.
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"the future that is our present,
and that didn't exist in their past."
A very important birthday. Like you say, a total turning point and, in a sense, an end of innocence for mankind.
Excellent write.
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