Your eyes were like the ocean,
an endless sea of dreams.
so much deeper than they seemed.
Your voice was like the wind,
whispering to me,
saying things that made me beleive.
Your touch was like Lightning
electrical burning me with every touch
making me love you way to much
Your Presence was like the night
Not lasting too long
because when I awoke you were gone.
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Love is so elemental...and so fleeting.
Wonderful write here.
-cheers
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Good stuff =]
Deep stuff, and relatable.
Great write maytee =]]
I love line 2 "an endless sea of dreams."
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Well penned...
Rather sad tho
I enjoyed your poem 
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Beautiful.
Thanks so much for writing this. It is amazing to read, and fun and very deep. Wow! I wish I could give you a thousand applauds.
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Wow! I really enjoyed reading this. The very last stanza really stood out to me. I love the metaphor you've used. Great write!
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Beautiful!
Very nice poem, absolutey adored "Your Presence was like the night Not lasting too long because when I awoke you were gone." Very Powerful!...DeeDee
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this is absolutely Beautiful!!
I love it. I thought you were doing elements at first but then the "Lightning" that's got a really strong effect.. and the "night" too.. i've never seen anyone use this image before.
Very creative, simple and again Beautiful.
Keep it up
(love your choice of colours too.. the blue is just wow and i feel it connects a lot with the poem)
Nooni
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