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Catch a Falling Star in your Pocket

Catch a falling star in your pocket
and don't let it go.

Now look far and wide
for any color bow.

Find a nice piece of paper and pencil
and take them in hand.

Write down all your hopes and dreams
and every single plan.

Now you saved that star, didn't you?
For you'll need it very soon.

Now roll up your paper
and tie it with your bow.

Next attach it to the falling star
and let it go!

Now watch as it soars off into the distance
twinkling in the night sky.

Your hopes nestled to its chest
and your dreams starting to fly.

Please tell me what you think

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  • JesskaSlayde
    September 2

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    oh this is so cute. the thought of catching a falling star is so adorable. i love the way you ended it. this is such a sweet poem.
    weel done


  • DeathtoloveShade gold member
    February 19

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    I absoutely loved it

    This is such a cute sweet little poem I really think you did a great job s Fallen


  • sweetieforever
    February 5
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    wow

    amazing


  • xxFallen Dreamsxx
    February 3

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    I love it!

    Wow..
    I really like this poem, alot....

    As I was reading, I wound up picturing myself setting my dreams free....

    This poem is extremely inspiring....

    ~Crissy~


  • fangs to blame
    February 2

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    "Now watch as it soars off into the distance
    twinkling in the night sky.

    "Your hopes nestled to its chest
    and your dreams starting to fly."

    I liked this piece alot.


  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    January 31

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    Interesting rhyme scheme, the flow was a little off in the third. Try "and take them in hand" so as to not repeat "now" in the second and third couplets.


  • StarEyes
    January 31

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    Justin,

    I love this!!! This is fantastic! What a great read this one is! I love the images that arise from the thoughts, and feelings in this one! This leaves one smiling and feeling good!

    Great job!!!

    and love

    All Knowing Mummy

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