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Letting Go

These harbored feelings
Break me down inside.
Why do I hang on
To sorrows’ sharp cliff
When I should let go?

There’s some comfort
Knowing I’m safe
Hanging up here
You can’t see hurt

But you should
See my hurt
I’m ready

So I
Freely

Fall

12/20/08
© Michaela Payne

Author notes

Diminished Hexaverse: A poem containing stanzas of 5 lines, then 4 lines, then 3 lines, then 2 lines, ending with one word. The syllables in each stanza correspond to the number of lines, i.e. 5 in each line in the first stanza, 4 in the second stanza and so on.

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  • jjbreunig3
    February 15
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    An enjoyable piece...

    An enjoyable piece; keep writing. --Joe


  • Luciferschild
    February 5

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    creative form, the poem overall communicated its theme very well and effectively. thank you for entering


  • daviscth silver member
    February 3

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    This is a beautiful poetry form dear. Your poem is overflowing with emotional undercurrents and I just love it. Good luck in the contest.

  • Phthonos
    February 2

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    Well, the writing style has already been praised, so I'll only briefly add my appriciation of that. The mathematician in my enjoyed noting that the total number of syllables in each stanza were square numbers
    The poem itself was rather enjoyed. It demonstrates thoughts and emotions that everone feels at some point, and I felt I could relate, having felt them myself in some sense, recently.

    Thank you.

  • Jailyn
    February 1

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    oh wow I have never seen this style done before! this is really interestng and creative!!! and, me being obsessive to the extreme, had to count the lines/syllable/etc to see if they were right and you were spot on!
    very good use of this style and the content of your poem was fantastic, very direct, simple and fulll of feeling. good job, thanks for sharing!

  • WanderingOdyssey
    February 1

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    I really like this style and I think you've demonstrated it very well. Your word choice for the last three lines was absolutely ideal for this style. You also have a simple elegance that I really like. Great work!
    -Odyssey

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