heat radiates from every pore of your being,
sending out magnetic-like waves,
and i am pulled towards you,
dragged into your magnetic field.
we are opposites;
you are strong,
i am weak,
[or is it the other way around?]
either way, i was more innocent,
your force was too great;
it was futile to try to fight against it.
i never work with an equal,
we force each other apart;
in mathematics two negatives make a positive,
in physics two negatives fight each other
and in reality two negatives make a catastrophe.
it seems that the people with the biggest gravitational pull find me,
and i am a tiny fish on the end of their rod,
i gobbled up the bait and now i'm getting pulled in;
and i know there's no point fighting,
my jaw is clearly open and it's too late;
you caught me,
i am at your mercy;
will you eat me?
or set me free?
it's a pity euthanasia is illegal.
Author notes
[x] True
[ ] Fiction
prompt: mathematics
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A contest entry
- round one; the circle continues by stargazer..
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heat radiates from every pore of your being,
sending out magnetic-like waves,
and i am pulled towards you,
dragged into your magnetic field.
we are opposites;
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i love that so much and i think it is great
wonderful
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i'll stick to my previous comment. (: brilliant♥
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Holyy geez ! I think this is one of my favorites by you. I loveloveLOVE how you wrote this one, seriously. It's incredible on everyy level.
-i never work with an equal,
we force each other apart;
in mathematics two negatives make a positive,
in physics two negatives fight each other
and in reality two negatives make a catastrophe.
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You put me in awe. (:
I absolutely love that, and that last line? wow. Struck me hard. Very hard.
♥
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I'm so honoured by your words, I find it hard to believe I put you in awe when you're so talented yourself
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Nice use of math and life, i love it!
~Chelsey
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awesome. i love the playfulness of this writing. I love the math prompt too. very unique use of the prompt for inspiration.
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love the metaphors.
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very descriptive too...
"in mathematics two negatives make a positive,
in physics two negatives fight each other
and in reality two negatives make a catastrophe." <--- very true.... lol
good job :]
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ohh i hate math with a passion... I love attractions tho.. and it soo true the Opposites sometimes attract trust me i know.. thats my and my hubby!!! good write!! goodluck with the contest!
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this is amazing.
crazy-awesome imagery and metaphors
lol was this inspired by magnets? haha i remember you asked me about physics lolol.
either way this is awesome. i really like it
especially the second stanzas. love that.
and i like the last line.. i agree..
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Yeah, my magnet opposites attracting
hahaha
Thank ya.
XD
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Opposites sometimes attract though.
Loved this, all the best,
MJ.
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Ha, this is just more kinda about me, and how I've never been attracted to my opposite
Thank you for the applause =]
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