( J O Y )
we took the joy
we saw
in the drift
of this little bird
as evidence
that everything
that mattered could be
...
ours
( B R E A T H L E S S )
and so now wanting
we paddled
our balsa boats
till we found that place
where wind and water were lovers
and together breathless
we found
...
wave
Author notes
this and last untitled poem were single piece that i split apart.
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Simply Lovely
I love when one can find balance I think there is a subtle peace that gifts this work enchantment my heartfelt thank you for this most sofly spoken enjoyment.
Lady E
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i do appreciate your words and effort for digging up this ole piece.
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i love the finding ... wave .. nicely done ... the whole ties back to the beginning ... crested .. i am distracted by the sub headings of joy and breathless (particularly since they are the stanzas) ... but thats just me ... luverly piece ... very much your voice >>> Gina
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i hear what you are saying there, but i think the Caps and spacing make these little titles distict enough ? thanks for your comment !
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you're welcome ...
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these are quite beautiful lines Steve. When someone writes like this - they are either the perfect dreamer, or at least one that has felt all of that and more, which is perfect as well.
eloquent and wonderful.
Kim
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dreamer .. i'll take dreamer, it has broader application and the half life is longer too.
thnx for reading and 4 taking your time to say so
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I'd take dreamer too. Too many other things are simply far too fleeting for my taste.
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if we can dream >>> then perhaps there's hope >>>> and ultimately faith ? who knows.
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peaceful...
where wind and water were lovers
and together breathless
It really nice to get lost in words, and thats just what happened to me...
As always I enjoyed reading!
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haven't seen you for awhile, thnx for tracking me and this one down ...
qb
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I have missed your writings.
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many thanks
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my favorite poetry is derived from or by nature.it gives us so much to pull from.we are tools of nature too.i think you have captured a moment and made it a beautiful piece of art.
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art is what we strive towards but seldom attain .. thnx for the kind words
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beautiful. there is such a sense of unity in reading this poem for me, of lovers and of man and woman with the earth. the last lines are just stunning..."where wind and water were lovers". i love how all the pronouns are 'we' and the incredible hope and optimism that pervades it.
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by SAGE proclamation then ... let it be that such waves shall encompass the hearts all of throughout the kingdom !
you're right, it's full of hope.
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where wind and water were lovers
I like that line, seems like wavelength to me just like Ms Tara chemistry and they are just flowing through like waves. it is subtly sexy
it's nice that you are writing again
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subtle indeed ... implied but not said
wow i see you are GOLD now
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"till we found that place
where wind and water were lovers
together breathless
we found
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waves"
i love the mix of wind & water ...leading to the waves..very beautiful, this poem also gives me that feeling of waves in my body [particularly, the chest & stomach] when i feel attracted to someone & turned on by them...also perhaps, later..you have described 'it' very well here.
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hey .. thnx. I'm actually quite happy with this one. Yes, i think you totally got the drift of "it".
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the beauty in poetry is not the evident, but the hidden which may never become evident. you have the "knack" of mystery, sometimes presented as none such yet... there it is. up to the reader to pen in the missing pieces in his mind. beautiful.
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thank you for the warmth and sincerity and your words ... yeah i think you're pretty good at filling in pieces
thnx Joe
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hmmm
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