you once told me
if i ever needed you
too close my eyes
and you'd be there
every promise made
meaningless
words spilled forward
like rain
you held my hand
between yours
even unspoken
the love was clear
the lies came so easy
no remorse
no tingle of regret
or of shame
you wiped my brow
through labour
my comforting coach
and life line
hurt like tearing shreds
torn through flesh
piercing and blinding
unforgiving
i watch you smile
her face before you
as i fall to my knees
doubled over in tears
i once knew your devotion
the memorizing look
the breath taking caress
and passion within
i stand holding our child's hand
submerged within my own grief
as your laughter flows towards us
and your new family over shadows
the old one now left behind
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Comments
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wow, thats one of saddening poems i have read so far... the last stanza is absolutely beautiful, darkly so...
nice imagery. cant imagine anyone going thru somethng so bad and yet i know as i say this, that there may be 1000s plagued by something similar.
thanks for sharing with us all, this beautiful poem
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This touched me so deeply. I know all about loss. Every word you wrote was just filled with emotion.
Very good poem.
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wow i never saw the ending coming and it knocked the wind out of me powerful
thank you so much for entering -
Very good poem. Well worded, and it cuts through to me. Thanks for entering.
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wow that was seriously amazing!
"you once told me
if i ever needed you
too close my eyes
and you'd be there"
kinda touched something in me that did....made me shiver for some reason -- thats how good it is!
thank you so much for entering such a great piece and good luck
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"the lies came so easy
no remorse
no tingle of regret
or of shame
you wiped my brow
through labour
my comforting coach
and life line"
-Those stanzas hit me the hardest.
This whole poem was hard for me to read. It brought back so many feelings of hurt for me, which is what I wanted. The last stanza is unlike my own heartbreak, but powerful none the less.
Thank you for entering.
This is amazing.
~Phoenix
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