If you see me siting there looking sad and blue
its because im staringat the stars thinking of you.
Thinking about the way you get me to laugh.
Thinking about the way you got me to snap back.
Back into reality. Got me to realize it will never
be you and me.
Only me and my dreams. These are
the things that get me sitting alone,
no one to hold, cold.
Looking at the stars.
A contest entry
- Give me some Luvin' n Soul! by natchstucco.
1050 points, ended February 16, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Not So Happily Ever After (Romeo And Juilet) by HereComesTheSun.
950 points, ended February 13, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
i just want to know what people think so if you can comment.
Comments
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great idea of writing and the rhyming was ok, as a bit of advice i say try to tie the stars in more the poem so the ending doesn't really seem like such a new concept
great work and thanks for entering -
o haha i actually liked how it was in paragraph form tho
but its still good this way, if you prefer -
i like this
i like how it rhymes, but is in a paragraph fromat -
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thanks
I totally forgot to change it. lol.
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