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My Mirage~

Missing image

Albany hair of silky length.

 

Shoulders

of graceful glance.

 

A portrait of petals reveal,

sweet savoir-faire in her sway.

 

A bouquet of beauty,

with aroma divine.

 

Breathtaking,

to the point of no return.

 

Warmth within her welcome,

gazing into pools aglow.

 

Mesmerized,

as if she uttered a whisper,

earthly ears should not hear.

 

Sandals sculpted of leather,

I bowed before her presence.

 

I lifted up my eyes,

She faded into the heavens…

 

And I,

into the night.

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Thanks to all who take the time and read me, peace.

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  • queenie
    February 7

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    wow, mr. weaver, the tapestry of this is so interwoven with your tenderness it's like the image has taken on a life of its own. you worked your magic here my love.i am awed!


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    February 7

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    Congratulations on the Golden Chalice!!

    Beautifully written; ornate and sensuous, rich in visual detail. Thank you for sharing your muse's masterpiece with all of us!!
    , & s always,
    xx Cyn xx


  • Sandygram
    February 5

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    Stunning Imagery

    A beautiful poem you have penned and very worthy of the Gold. Congratulations. Take care, Sandy


  • Sharon Corr gold member
    February 2

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    ~Awesome, Rich, Lyrical, & Beautiful~

    ~Dearest Timothy~ How your lyrical love light shines
    so bright, for all to see. Another brilliant masterpiece!
    The image flows perfect with your lyrics. Your heart and pen are weaved in gold, as gentle music flows from your soul~

    All my love, Sharon


  • loveangerbeauty
    February 2

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    this is really beautiful, i love the imagery and how you described her as "Breathtaking to the point of no return"
    i also loved the last bit
    "I lifted up my eyes,
    She faded into the heavens…

    And I,
    into the night."


  • sense surreal gold member
    February 1

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    what a way to describe her and to call her 'your mirage' which makes her so lovely and elusive...

    I lifted up my eyes,
    She faded into the heavens…

    And I,
    into the night.

    even just for these lines, already justified the title


    Fly Shy


  • Stardust-luvr
    January 31

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    my dearest the love that shines within the depths of your soul brings me to tears as i feel every words in a hope to feel the presence - sadly all mine end up only in dreams. well done love and many blessings always xxxx love ya always Star xxx


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    January 31

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    ABSOLUTELY BREATHTAKING

    ok dear, dear timothy. i think you are trying to make me cry with the beauty of your words. as a lol--i live in Albany--lol. i think you should not go away in this write and she sees what she has though. you know me however, i always hate the lost love thing from anyone.

    very beautiful indeed. viyanna rosemarie


  • couldbeworse
    January 31

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    beautifully done. written well and flowed nicely. you painted a beautiful portrait with words. I loved the pic too.


  • Angelflower
    January 31

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    wow.. now what to say what to say to something this beautiful.. Your words seemed to flow off the screen and into the readers heart. I really loved this.. you did such a wonderful job with that picture!! the ending was perfect! thank you very much for your entry.. best of luck!

    Angel


  • Lonely
    January 31

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    I loved end to this poem.. as you fade into the night, and she into the heavens.. Wow this one is beautifully written Tim, and the words are so powerful, discription awesome.. No need to tell you, I totally love your work and totally love you too! Excellent write!

    Love always,
    Wifey


  • condor gold member
    January 31

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    An excellent write that did justice to the picture. Seems like this person was definately bowing down to an angel that had visited in the night there. Such amazing words capturing the feeling of the speeker. Love the flow and the rhythm and I wish you all the very best in the contest.


  • Soft-Rain
    January 31

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    Truly beautiful...a masterful use of wording to compliment your purpose. The last lines were amazing in just theirselves:

    I lifted up my eyes,

    She faded into the heavens…



    And I,

    into the night.


    Wonderful,
    ~Lisa~


  • Angel With No Halo
    January 31

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    wow.. this was an amazing write. The title captured me, and the poem blew me away.. very nicely done! I could really picture her, even without the picture Keep up the good work!!!


  • poetryrocksmysox
    January 31

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    Wow~

    Talk about captivating, whoa, this had the words in all the right places to do just that! I love this, and how it ended makes it that much more amazing! You are truly brilliant, thanks for weaving your magic once again that graces all our eyes with your beauty!

    Love K.

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