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Deception

From your chin to your eyes it cries and it wells

Your breath is all caught and you dig in your nails

To the top of your head is where it does spread

It erupts it explodes it's a gusher of red

To the pit of your stomach, yes vomit you'll do

You're breathless and sad no cry no screams

No words could describe the horror you feel

when you look at your life and know it's for real

 

He destroyed your life with deception and lie

 

Death is the only place any peace lies

 

 

Author notes

lies and deception can butcher your soul, but only if you let it.
love like this you do not need." mikey was a good dog."

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  • piccola silver member
    March 31

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    lots of raw emotion and the rhyme is good. I'm not a fan of rhyming the same word or form of the word so close as you have done in the last 2 lines. I think in the last line you might have used allies, (or something)


  • Danna Hobart
    February 12

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    Yeah, looking at my life lately surely will cause this sort of reacition Thank you for entering my contest.


  • DragonflyDream
    February 11

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    yikes
    this is why i used to hate mirrors
    a very accurate poem

    love the last line
    it all comes together so wel


  • new light
    February 5

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    this is really good!

    i don't think it needs to be revised that much personally.
    as a suggestion though, i don't think the first word in the first line: "From your chin to your eyes it cries and it wells" needs to be capitalized.

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