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The Outer Realm of My Heart

The intensity still pervades its extreme core

and still I sway from the thoughts.

Deep was the indignation, deeper was the regret

This risk, I can't chance this risk.

 

 

Even as my heart embraces your siege, skirting

so delicately around its perimeter.

Stark is your attendance, riveting are your intentions.

As I lament lost love, you spin on the edge of my ens,

 

 

awaiting entrance into the defunct marrow of my soul.

The tentacles of your desires brushes across the surface

of the deceit ingrained within, engaging into rivalry

a heart that still cries and a mind who needs to try.

 

 

As I take refuge from the perils of loving again,

you tread so determinedly on the outskirts of lust.

Which is where I must bind the affections you bear,

for to succumb brings to the inside those banished burns.

 

 

I sight you from every corner of my being, yet outside you

must remain for with you comes the remembrance of pain.

Your teardrops tickle the borders weakening my composure,

manipulating the cracks as they widen to engage your spirit.

 

 

Inner strength, a traitor, as my resolve crumbles under

your berry drenched lips, sending tinges to the bountiful

sway of neglected hips, yet on the circumference of this

heart is where you are destined to be if I choose to be sane.

 

 

My interal venue is my sanctity and even as my mind

seems to decipher the risk as low, my heart holds fast

to its protective swagger and refuse you welcome to its

still shattered abode, thus relegating you to the outside.

 

 

marjoriejoyceleslie    01/30/09

 

 

 

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  • penman gold member
    March 7, 2009
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    Excellent

    Very creative and so well done. Thank you for sharing


  • Loki silver member
    February 5, 2009

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    The poem was very nice. I will say though that I had to copy and paste it into wordpad just to be able to read it. The white text on pink background is very straining on the eyes and unfortunately, judges in anonymous contests aren't given the choice to hide backgrounds. It may be easier to read with red text, but the white was just too much. The word usage and vocabulary was good. You may have meant siege rather than seige (remember, I before e except after c) and peripheral is misspelled in your author notes. Other wise this was a very nice write. Thank you for entering and best of luck in the contest.

    -Løki


  • LdyBrknWing gold member
    February 3, 2009

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    Oh My

    What an awesome poem, my dear friend! Your word choices throughout this gut-wrenchingly beautiful poem tore at the very core of my emotions, having felt, though not possessing the ability to convey the depth of the pain, anger, and frustration that you always seem to write down with seemingly little, to no effort. I simply sit in awe as I read, Joyce, inspired by your words. A standing ovation for this! Bravo!

    Paula


  • Bean Sidhe silver member
    February 1, 2009

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    There is a very nice use of adjective within this piece that I found myself drawn to. Lovely. Thank you for your entry & good luck in the contest!

    -Bean


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    January 30, 2009

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    excellent~

    Wowzers
    I love the imagery you have penned in this poem...
    Love the entire poem but I think the last stanza is the clincher:My interal venue is my sanctity and even as my mind

    seems to decipher the risk as low, my heart holds fast

    to its protective swagger and refuse you welcome to its

    still shattered abode, thus relegating you to the outside.
    Love the background too where did you find this at???
    Best of luck in the contest
    This is a winner in my book
    Hugs
    Susan~~~

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