Walking away from a home of abuse
Wondering "Why and What is the use."
Turning away from the things that bring pain
Realizing I'm dirty and feeling ashamed
The farther I walk, the cleaner I feel
Am I getting away, Is this for real
I'm letting go of a hurt that cut deep
Wounds start to heal I'm starting to leap
But I trip and stumble and something feels wrong
I'm gaining weakness, I don't feel strong
I'm starting to slow and I don't know why
I'm breaking down and starting to cry
I see happiness, it's right ahead
But I'm slowing down, I feel dead
One step at a time, I think I can make it
But doubt fills my mind, I feel so unfit
So there up ahead, happiness leaves me here
I'm lonely and depressed and feel much dispair
I feel regret and I feel so much hurt
My emotions changing, they begin to convert
The hope that was there has left me for good
I feel useless, worthless, misunderstood
So here I lay with nothing inside
I put on a smile and behind it I hide
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A contest entry
- Enter If You Dare (hahapun.) by SomeGirlYouKnew.
1400 points, ended February 2, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Emo/ Death/ Abuse by Violent Glass.
550 points, ended February 13, 59 entries
Honorable mention
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very dark though true i could see this person as i kept on reading i could sense the pain and the feeling
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im glad u won an award for this b- e- a- utiful write
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I thought this was a very brave and insightful poem.I always find it sad that those who are abused often feel worthless as you said in your poem,when its actually the abuser who is at fault.This poem highlighted that no matter how hard it is to physically walk away from a bad situation,its even harder to deal with the emotional anguish.This is so well written.Montey
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this is such a profound and beautiful piece of art you really drew the picture and visualized your emotions even that i saw you running away from home with tears on your cheeks wanting to get away from all this shit ,and i saw you removing the remains of your body ,then you fell into hole of confusion and you felt lost as you are away from the people who are supposed to guide you to the shore to start your life, in the end i wanna tell you that you believed in god and he will guide you home just rely on him and he will take your hand and show you the way to the light .
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This piece was strongly written with many dark memories behind it I can tell but there is a hope as well just glimmering inside of it. Excellently written, good way to combine soul and heart.
Peace & Love
~J
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This is an amazing piece, the flow the words, everything fit just right and nothing seemed "forced" or out of place. I too know what its like to hide behind a smile. The emotion also shows perfectly, very good write keep it up.
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Aww, the last line is really heartbreaking. It speaks of hope in the beginning but takes a turn for the dark in the end, a very sad piece. Well written and Great work!
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i LOVED it
great write
the flow and the words you used were absolutly amazing
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so sad, but your emotions shine true in this piece, so deep and heartfelt. Great write chica, good luck in the contests!!
Love ya
~Michaela~
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this has a great rhythm to it, and the rhymes are well done for the most part.
the story is well done too.
you could do with using spell check, though.
thanks for entering, and good luck in my contest!
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